Do you love me?

Do you love me?

A Poem by Mr.Writer

My parents kept me warm during the storms
My parents kept me safe from the unsafe
They followed me everywhere I went only to prevent what they feared the most
Losing me

From raising me to bathing me
From helping me talk to helping me walk
To even teaching and preaching
Until when? Until when would they understand that I didn't need all this
All I wanted... was their love, so I could fly like a dove

One day, I walked up with courage to ask them a question
They raised their hands in plea not to ask "do you love me?"
I stood there in shock and heard the tick-tock from the clock

I walked while getting stalked home
I walked while getting mocked home
No one understood my pain, while I passed the lane
I soon went on a plain, flying away in vain as the rain came

© 2017 Mr.Writer


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So we begin with a parents protective wing sheltering their child from the harsh world we live in. You take us on a journey from being so young and the first few lines show their unreseved love. So i was surprised when it came to then line of asking them the question 'do you love me'
Change 'plain' to PLANE.
But saying that, it was still a good read, and even though it ended on a sad note so to speak, the amount of love shown in the fist couple of verses far outweighed the ending.

Mark.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

matrixmark

7 Years Ago

We are all human, we all make mistakes. No shame in it at all. If dont make mistakes, then we dont l.. read more
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Very true! :)
Thank you
matrixmark

7 Years Ago

Anytime.
Mark.



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This is fantastic. I am sorry I don't get why the parents asked him not to ask if they love him. I think I get it, but I kind of don't. It is OK though because this is a fantastic poem. Keep up the good work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Children get too much cocked up by the over-protectiveness of their parents until they themselves become one and understand it . :) Even i feel it sometimes or the other .

It was a bit confusing as to why they feared of him asking if they loved him. My thoughts put it as he was adopted and they never wanted him to feel such and so they pampered him too much just afraid of the single question "do you love me?"
Overall it was a good one. I liked reading it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


So we begin with a parents protective wing sheltering their child from the harsh world we live in. You take us on a journey from being so young and the first few lines show their unreseved love. So i was surprised when it came to then line of asking them the question 'do you love me'
Change 'plain' to PLANE.
But saying that, it was still a good read, and even though it ended on a sad note so to speak, the amount of love shown in the fist couple of verses far outweighed the ending.

Mark.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

matrixmark

7 Years Ago

We are all human, we all make mistakes. No shame in it at all. If dont make mistakes, then we dont l.. read more
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Very true! :)
Thank you
matrixmark

7 Years Ago

Anytime.
Mark.
Its lovely..very good write

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you!!
this is so good keep writing!!:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thanksss!!
All those things should have been enough for you to realise their love...Anyway, whatever it may be, it's a nice poem. Keep writing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Lol I know
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Thanks zoe
Zoya

7 Years Ago

You're welcome..
Parents do love us. Even though we may hurt them number of times. It is not a question to be asked to them we can feel their love in their presence. A nice poem I like that you realize what your parents have done for you.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

I have read only this one.
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

Ohh ok :) thanks
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

You're welcome

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Mr.Writer

Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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