Complicated love (POEM)

I dance in joy

When I see a boy

He is tall and handsome

But he demands a ransom

I ask why?

He says "MYOB and die"

I run away sobbing

Bawling my eyes OUT!

Next day, I meet another boy

So this time I give him a toy

He frowns at me and walks away

And says 'Have a good day"

Before he walks further, I grab his hand

And ask "do you want to play in the band?"

He smiles at me and agrees

Then I tell him to go down to his knees

He looks at me confused but says "fine"

So I show him a sign.

"I have a boyfriend, shoo!"

This time, I walk away, chuckling 

Leaving the boy yelling AT ME!

Reviews

[Zoya]

The rhyming is good here. I understand what you want to indicate through this poem, it's meant to be funny I guess. However I feel that the concept of this poem is a bit obscure. But don't worry, this is still a nice poem. Keep writing!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you zoe! :)

[Gina]

This was brilliant. I mean seriously, your writing style, your mood/tone, your rhyming, it was all perfect. It compelled me to this in a way that was new to me. I LOVED this. Keep up the amazing writing.

Always, Gina.

We are writers.
No more than that... We are artists, but we use our weapons; words.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Gina!!! :) it really means alot for me!

[Gina]

No problem, anytime! You are very talented.

Gina.

[matrixmark]

Just popping here to say both of you are good writers. That is all.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Aww thanks Mark

[matrixmark]

No need for thanks. Just saying it as it is.

Mark.

[Gina]

Thank you Mark!

[matrixmark]

Pleasure.

Mark.