Hear My Song

I sit and wait

For the sea to bring me

A crew of young men

to satisfy me

When they are close

Ill sang them this song

They will crash and be mine

For  eternity long

Come to me sailor hear my song

Come to me sailor

Come along

When the shipwrecks

You’ll swim to shore

I'll seduce you with my voice

And have you hooked forever more

You will always hear my song

So leaving you can't do

I'll be in your head

Forever unable to undo

Come to me sailor hear my song

Come to me sailor

Come along

Reviews

[Wild Rose]

No rocks here for you to sit on to sing your song only the distant headland with its warning lighthouse
Sand banks with shifting sand
The graves of wartime trainee pilots
Uncovered by gale force wind and stormy seas
And taken back on the next tide

Are they some of your prey

[Diane]

very well could be. Thank you for your review.

[Kichu]

The seductive yet dangerous tone used by the siren is coming out really well. As we hear from her perspective, it makes us want to shout and warn the poor sailors.

[Diane]

haha thanks for the awesome review.

[Chris]

Sang? or sing? Shipwrecks? or ship wrecks?

The rhythm stumbles a bit

I like your handling of the theme.

[Diane]

Thank you for the honest review.

[Cadel]

Call me Odysseus, because you've got my attention.

[Diane]

Wow, a very clever review indeed. Should have used beeswax. ;-)

[blythe b]

love this poem -- reminds me of a siren

[Diane]

Thank you. That is exactly what It is.

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. It feels like you are a mermaid singing. I loved this so much. Thank you very much for writing this. 😀

[Diane]

Well thank you for the sweet review.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad I came across this. This poem became close to my heart. I thank you so much for writing this. ☺

[Hannah]

I like the point of view. Normally we would see the sailors being lead astray by a siren, but now we get to see the siren's thoughts. It's an interesting take, and I can't help but feel bad for the sailors trapped by the siren's song.

[Diane]

haha I know. I would hate to know I am trapped and not be able to do anything about it. That right there sucks as it is.

[Samuel Dickens]

So, you're the one that's been luring us sailors onto the rocks for all these eons! Passing through the straits of Messina once, I'm pretty sure we heard you. Luckily, the captain was gay. (I'm kidding, but those straits were famous for its sirens) Being an old sailor, I especially enjoyed this.

[Diane]

haha might have been me.
Thank you for the awesome and funny review.

[Diane]

Aww Love the new Picture!

[Samuel Dickens]

Thanks. I was about two.

[Diane]

That face! So beautiful!

[KCthelastboyscout]

Beautiful and seducing.not like your usual stories of writing.an unexpected but nice change of pace

[Diane]

thank you very much!

[h d e rushin]

there is a simplicity here that I can learn to love. Like a dress with a foldover collar or something
worn smooth by touching or by the splash of the see or the wind. I don't know if you did this deliberately or by happenstance + I don't know anything about the emotions of another person. All I know is that you have layered desire on top of hope on top of wishing until the urge is no long palpable. And who among us can doubt such sincerity / great poem....dana

[Diane]

Thank you so much.
I am writing these for a long time best friend. She loves Mythical Creatures, so I am using how she would think to write these.