Long walk home

It's an unknown land.. this patch I've been sentenced to
I wish I could evade.. return home
But I've lost the directions..
It's a long walk home.. and my feet bleed

One warm hug.. to say its alright..
Seems to have grown into so much of a chore
A little love.. feigned or felt
That'd make me feel safe.. is the hardest ever ordeal

But there's no whining.. I chose to recede
From the road to animated vivacity..
And slip into that dark alley..
In my quest for the utopic haven

It's a cold world.. co-inhabited by solitude alone
I wish I'd have a choice..
I wish my plea I could voice
But it's a long walk home.. and there's no hand to guide me on..

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

It was nice, one of the songs by Dido came to my mind while reading this.
Though the writing was great, but it was very much abstract and raw...so, it needs a quick polishing.

[Coyote Poetry]

So sad and powerful. Life leave us confuse and lost. Your words brought me into a sad and lonely part of a life. Home can be a new place with the right people around. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[StoryTailor]

Ah... Marvelous, It describes what the narrator is feeling so pleasantly. Well... maybe pleasant isn't the right word. Lonely and bleak is what I got from it, and those aren't pleasant feelings. What I meant was... the words created a picture in my mind of these feelings, and it's pleasant for me to be able to see them with so little words. Wait... that's not exactly what I meant either...

Reviewing poems has always been difficult for me. The point is, I think, that this is an enjoyable piece to read, and that I liked it. It was pleasant for me. Haha... Great job with this one!

[Dev]

Realy well written. Full of emotions. Its like as though the world moves on, even when you lose a sense of right and wrong. Going back is a tough journey that has to be done alone. Thats what i make of it atleast !!

very well written