If Tragedy Could Speak

Sitting alone, crying to yourself..
You've drenched your best shirt..with those perennial tears
All pity's dried out.. your pain's just another rut
Snap out of it girl.. that's the trazillionth time your hand's been cut

Your stained self.. the sins you've claimed
The spectres looming over.. that you've blamed
Of haunting your supposed naiveté..
Into a crippled doom

If tragedy could speak..
If glum would have it's rights
I'm sure they'd make a plea..
Beg you.. to let them be

Your calls for help.. a perfect salvation
That much sought after warmth.. you could use
The friends you play with.. against your will you say
All that's "happening".. that you'd love to give away

You're a poser.. you've had that spelt out
Wash away that facade.. that shrieks of horror
All that love that shouldered your outbursts
Lays limp.. tired of your never ending rant.. a freak show of self-blame

If tragedy could speak..
If tears could chose their path
I'm sure they'd pick a different flow..
Than be the voice to your unspoken woe

Those endless nights.. writing SOS notes to yourself
Forcing the girl within.. to give up the hope she had
So you'd not fall short.. of reasons to mourn
So you could justify.. your petition to hell for letting you burn

A sinner you are.. a sinner you've become
For reasons other than you've struggled to achieve
The hours you've lost.. blackened by your cries
The faith you blew.. to ascertain all bliss dies

If tragedy could speak..
If love could pick it's suicide..
I'm sure you'd win at last..
'Coz you've finally conquered grim.. girl, you learn fast..!

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

This feels lyrical, though admittedly it's not got the right kind of flow to be a song. First and foremost, pick a damn rhyme scheme. If you want to be free verse, fine. If you want to rhyme, fine. But don't go flitting between the two for the whole poem.

Second, there are a few (okay more than a few) times where your flow gets interrupted by you trying to jam too long of a thought onto one line. You may want to read through this and see if you can compact any ideas into a more concise version of the same.

Also, seeing SOS written out anywhere but in Message In A Bottle just looks weird...

Despite all that, however, I really enjoyed this. You could clean up the structure and the language a bit, but this is a really strong piece.

[Therene]

If tragedy and love could speak, I'd be mortified. :))

Kidding aside, you made a very strong point. Although there were times I got a little off with the flow, this is one of the best I've read from your works.

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

I really like this one!

[B A S S E M A S H R A F]

Masterpiece !!
go on

[snapstache]

Thanks for the review!
This was you best that I've read so far.
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[Tanu]

I'd say if love could speak... It would only rhyme bout the three little pigs and their family of bliss... High time these wolves leave us sis.. Love you whether or not i express it often but love you a lot chubbo..

And psstt... This sure is the best I've ever read.. Go girl go ..!! Too whit too whit too woohiooo :)

[deeps]

I so can relate to this one.
This one has so much feeling in it.
It's also very well written, such a wonderful flow!