The Road to "The End"

They've got you cornered .. an unassailable feint
Your struggle's a waste.. you wriggle in pain
Their fierce gambit.. your eternal trepidation

That blithe wish.. destined to annihilation..
Your attempt to cease.. another meek misfire
That dream you lived for..
Metamorphosed into the most haunting spectre..
A deathly wraith.. you wish you'd never dreamt

The ruthless assassins.. they cut no slack
You're doomed to bereavement ... the gravest end..
A prejudiced combat.. a futile fray

You learn to give in.. to subside.. self-tranquilised
Your throat dried out.. your screech just another faint effort
Al teared out.. you let out a torpid plea

Your plea may be heard.. though, to no avail
The callous assassins.. only an austere moot prevails

While you're paralyzed to your end
Your weak orison.. they mock.. sneers so savage
Crippling the very last hope.. for that tentative salvation..

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

There's a fine line between using your vocabulary well and just showing off, and you are treading very carefully on it. You use at least a dozen words that the average person will almost never see in daily conversation, and while I'm always a fan of higher English, big words can draw attention away from the core of the poem, and that's what's happened here. You have a great dark and haunting read right here, but it's so caught up in the language it loses some of its punch.

[deeps]

Wow This is one amazing write here.
I like this write. It speaks. Such a wonderful flow as well.

[J]

This is awesome ! Deep words and deep meaning :D I loved it!

[DeepDarkPoetry]

this poem had alot of meaning to it and i think you should keep writing.


DeepDarkPoetry
p.s if you could take a look at my poems

[talulu love]

WHOA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WOW!!!!!!!!!!!! good OMG... i luv it ur words r so big and full of meaning daaaaang ur good...keeep it up and i luve the pic u used 4 it ....it goes with the poem...goood job