Biased Purgation

 

Trudging along, a familiar street
My goal's in sight
I try with all my might
Something goes wrong, the light fades out

I sway along the eerie wind
No one around
Not a soul , nor a being
Not even the slightest sound

My vision's blocked
My senses imapired
Where am I headed?
My atmosphere seems lost

Tossed about like another rag-doll
I'm being played with

My destiny undefined

In this biased fray 

 

I hear a threat

"Your castigation's been sculptured"

I muster a response..a meek struggle

"Atleast give me my sin ..that brought this upon me "

 

You're grim's child 

You should've known

You deserve all grey

To purgation you've been sworn

 

Your summon's been issued

You'll be flayed alive

No last wishes 

No hope for which you might strive

 

I close my eyes

I will surrender

Crying out for my saviours

But no one's allowed to hinder..

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Therene]

Biased Purgation aye? I must say this one is...vivid.

This isn't exactly the first one I've read about the topic, but I do like it better. :D

You give out the best impression on where it's going.

The flow is good, not too long lines. :)

All the best. Keep up the good work.

[The Perfectionist]

Your flow and rhythm are good in this one, but your rhyming is still suffering. As I've said before, make up your damned mind! Also,

"Your castigation's been sculptured"

Just...just no. That's too far.

Seven down, one to go...can you tell I'm running out of material?

[Dev]

Well You might think i sugar coat whatever i say , But its not like that. If you put up such impeccable stuff, what do you expect me to say ?
I like the way your writing outlines the despair everyone goes through everyday, Questioning the sanctity of it all. How and why things happen. All we want is a comfortable spot in the world. Something we can call our own.
Thats what it means to me anyway. Very deep as usual.

[Simone]

wow, brilliant poem. I love your style
and your words are truely deep.
I look foward to more of your work.
Great job.