Visiting the Visitor

This poem was inspirited by a poem written by N o o d l e h e a d named "The Visitor" I wanted to write something for that visitor, I hope you are listening.

I know you, you turned away from me

Hiding that face of a memory

A past glance branded your likeness

Your attention is mandatory

 

Your crazy impulses had a lasting effect

I have been daydreaming

Smiling for some understanding

Of your reluctant demeanor

 

You are not coy

As my extension of companionship is focused

You must indulge and embrace

State your farewells to the visitor

 

Stop Standing by while I trickle for you

Converse with me

I see the sadness escaping your spirit

Forcing the darkness to watch a sunrise

 

You are the master of your presence

Hold in your howls

The leap of faith is in your possession

Passionate exchanges are desired

Reviews

[Angel of Heart's]

Your ability to express lucidly is staggeringly beautiful... I certainly appreciate the artistry that flows throughout ....we bleed... those of us who write or try to.. we bleed for everyone to see, though at times the blood is mistaken or ignored it is always there.. your ability to put into words and into form this bleed of anguish and emotion is truly to be admired... You always leave me mesmerised in your word-weaving and imagery.

[Lady Glitter]

Quite abstract, but with an easy flow, though the theme is somewhat elusive. But that's how abstract poetry is, the more abstract, the harder the message is to discern by anyone but the writer. I have several abstract poems.

I like this "Your crazy impulses had a lasting effect
I have been daydreaming
Smiling for some understanding
Of your reluctant demeanor."

The last 2 lines of this stanza, particularly, are clever.

[Scarlet Alice]

haven't read the visitor but still its good.

[Lily Mae]

Simply beautiful..xo

[Allan W]

Another good write! I shall have to start looking up my new found friends books online. Hopefully one day I can follow suite in the years to come. Keep up the good work!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The next to the last line is strangely ironic...faith being evidence of things unseen...a leap being an action requiring faith...we must believe we will land safely...but we can never be certain...I enjoyed this write...very good work.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Thank you, have you read Noodlehead's "The Visitor". I had a few question for her and she played the mysterious roll, so wrote something that will counteract.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

No...I haven't read that one.

[mikl paul]

the last stanza is very well done.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Thank you very much

[Jack...]

This is nicely penned and presented. I hear you are having a book of your poetry published. Congratulations my friend.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

it's on sell at Amazon, I need more exposure so my name can get out there.

[Jack...]

What if i win a free copy in your contest?????

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

That will be cool. All I ask is that you give me your honest opinion be it good or bad. I can't get better with criticism...

[Jack...]

No problem

[s y e]

This is very well written. Well done! :)

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

thank you, your poem inspired it.

[s y e]

Welcome and that's lovely ;-)