Filling My Void of Universe

This piece was formed from reading and writing a review of Noodlehead's "Unlucky for Some". I always thought I was meant for a higher calling, please take time and read my poem, comment are welcome.

I have often exercised my curiosity of purpose

Having sleepless night of subterranean thought

Analyzing every vague memory of my existence

Dancing with the ideas of my belongings

To this vast, infinite cycle of life

Hoping to have my name splattered across the stars

“I feel that I’m meant for greatest”

 

But it is so hard to trudge my essence!

 

Traveling back and forward like a nomad

But with a sound perseverance of everlasting spirit

Touching every individual with smiles of love

Happiness and acceptance of my gifts

Which I share freely

Because my soul will not let me ponder on

Guiding me towards the inevitable progression

Of a higher mind state and understanding

 

Craving out a permanent seat in the cosmos

Warrant the keenest discipline of self

Embodying the vitalities of the surrounding

Breathing in the knowledge of my past self

Creating new genetic code of awareness, flesh and spirit

Passing that inherited material into the future

Cleansing the path for an immediate transference

Into my void of the universe

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This sounds like every great thinker, philosopher and poet who has ever written down a word. There is a loneliness and yearning to belong which follows greatness and intellect. But it is also those very feelings which indicate a path of aspiration. The whole nature of man is held in three letters...O...G...and D. In one form they spell DOG...if reversed they spell...GOD...and we are constantly striving between our animal and spiritual influences and between those two natures of dog and god. May we all learn to be more godlike and less bestial than our fellow four footed creatures.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Finding some form of impossible in this possible world separates us from the everyday animal that (excuse my language) eat, drink, s**t, and f**k - and there are some of us who match those four word exactly.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I try to explain to many people that there are riches of the soul and of the mind which transcend the body and its functions but many simply "just don't get it" Thoreau got it. Emerson got it. But there are many who only live to fulfill their desires for sex, food, drink, drugs, sleep, work, money, or fame. I believe to understand myself and my life is a far greater goal and certainly one worthy of my time and energy. Your expression of an equal sentiment is evidence of your desire to truly understand and not just blindly accept everything as it seems. I really appreciate that mentality. And words are simply words to me...they express the things they are meant to express or they are poor word choices. That's what being a good writer is all about. Bless.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Such a wisdom in these words... science, love and grace, and all trust even...
I totally enjoyed your piece, some lines are very relatable to me!
This is a stunning write. You created here something very unique.

- Elisa

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

I believe to truly find one's self you have explore every facet of life and rely that to the world.

[Jack...]

This reads with an opened palm, offering all that can be offered, promising what can and rightly be. This my friend is the writings of a true poet...no make believe, just honest words for all to read. Very nice.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Thank you Sir, I always think about my purpose/impact on this earth and it hit me like a ton of bricks and I had to express it in ink.

[Jack...]

You did it well.

[Nik]

You embodied your spiritual beliefs/goals with imagery of the cosmos. It was good, but somewhat lacking in structure and rhyme =) A good poem all the same.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Thank you, My structure of writing is a bit different from the norm, I'm more of a flow man then rhyme, connecting lines with eachother forming a story stanza. Maybe this will hello you with my writings in the future. :-)

[Frieda P]

A deep and intriguing read, with lots of food for thought. I was drawn in from the start, probably because I can relate....

I have often exercised my curiosity of purpose
Having sleepless night of subterranean thought
Analyzing every vague memory of my existence

No sleep will cause you to question your existence and apparently write some good poetry as is evident in your case. Very nicely pen'd. Like this one a lot.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Thank you very much, I aim to please...

[Trigorin]

You're definitely on to something here. The concept is very good, and the way you express yourself is definitely well-honed. One thing I would caution you on is to avoid using large words just for the sake of large words - some of your word choice seems like it doesn't have much point besides just sounding fancy, and that detracts somewhat from the beauty of the rest of the poem. A minor note - check your spelling. Some words are incorrect, but that's really a minor matter. You've put out some solid stuff here. Well done.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Thank you for your kind words, The reason I use the over size words, :-) is because the words themselves have various meaning to each person that reads my poetry. I understand using simpler words, can help, but it will also take away from my meaning, I feel like it will be like having a one word conversation with someone.