A Killing

This poem is very emotional, if you have a weak stomach don't read this one, it comes from the heart....VERY emotional! A slow miserable death of ones spirit, soul, mind and body.

Taking someone's life__

    no blades needed...

    no guns needed...

just with words instead,

just with fists instead.

 

The victim left__

just left, for dead...

to bleed on the inside.

As the killer just sits back

and watches as she slowly dies.

 

     A slow miserable death,

     words cutting deep into her soul

     like sharp knives piercing one's heart.

     Dragging her down word by word,

     shout by shout.

 

     A killing of one's spirit,

     fists just pounding over and over until

     the beat is no longer in her heart.

     Bruises left in place,

     soon disappear on the outside...

     But left for life on the inside.

 

But where's the evidence?

No proof in sight!

    Just left for dead night after night.

    The killer just gets away...

    with the killing.

               No gun.

               No Knife.

Reviews

[Lottie]

wow brutal emotional poem there... I love the words being the weapon... words are fists and they cause so many different emotions and weaknesses that u didnt even know you had! The way you've constructed the verses it seems like your being knocked back e.g. like falling down stairs and then at the end with the lines near to the middle but slightly to the side you just have that image of a face appearing over the limp fallen body.

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

this happens all over the world, when a man dies inside he festers into the thing he does not want to be well done!

[The Mad Prophet]

Awsome, well not in the since that you probably went through with this, but I love that you shared it. I am a sucker when it comes with deep meaning, and lots of emotion. Thank you, I enjoyed this one.

[Berserker[Diktator Von ..]

I like how you compare a physical killing to an emotional killing...it was completely cool..Great job with this one...keep up the good work..it is awesome.....

[Joseph - Michael]

There's an old saying about the weapons; Words can be fatal in depend on how they were used to be spoken for. Also, In my own personal motto; "I don't need any weapons, because I am my own weapon" (that was when I was young and always get into streetfights)

Anyway, I've enjoyed how you've used the details in the order like this, feel like I was watching the short story about the killer in one of those "Tales From The Crypt" or something like that...

On the other hand, it's all still good tho, so no worries there...