A Killing

This poem is very emotional, if you have a weak stomach don't read this one, it comes from the heart....VERY emotional! A slow miserable death of ones spirit, soul, mind and body.

Taking someone's life__

    no blades needed...

    no guns needed...

just with words instead,

just with fists instead.

 

The victim left__

just left, for dead...

to bleed on the inside.

As the killer just sits back

and watches as she slowly dies.

 

     A slow miserable death,

     words cutting deep into her soul

     like sharp knives piercing one's heart.

     Dragging her down word by word,

     shout by shout.

 

     A killing of one's spirit,

     fists just pounding over and over until

     the beat is no longer in her heart.

     Bruises left in place,

     soon disappear on the outside...

     But left for life on the inside.

 

But where's the evidence?

No proof in sight!

    Just left for dead night after night.

    The killer just gets away...

    with the killing.

               No gun.

               No Knife.

Reviews

[Lottie]

wow brutal emotional poem there... I love the words being the weapon... words are fists and they cause so many different emotions and weaknesses that u didnt even know you had! The way you've constructed the verses it seems like your being knocked back e.g. like falling down stairs and then at the end with the lines near to the middle but slightly to the side you just have that image of a face appearing over the limp fallen body.

[Krista]

When I read this I almost cried. It is very emotional and I can understand the feeling. You did a wonderful job of writing this poem. I can't say much else sadly. Wonderful JOB!!

[Twilight]

Pretty good! Dark, emotional and written in an original way! Perhaps, the apparition from the darkness here, could either be interpreted as the killer, or the very act of dying?

[Jinx's Heart]

So true in too many cases. Verbal abuse and such can be a killer. Awesome fluidity and rhythm. Very well written!

[Sound]

This is a very disturbing image of things that go unpunished many of the times in our society. Not always because there is no proof, but because no one admits the punishment is ever being commited. Very sad.

[Adela Muresan]

Great imagery.
Yeah, there sure are a lot of criminals on the lose thease days.
I like the idea you wrote it on.

Great write.

A.M.

[Ian]

Wow!
Awesome write!
This is a very original poem...
I mean, you're right! There's no need of knife or gun to kill...
You know this poem reminds me one of my poems "These Deadly Words You Spoke"...
This is an awesome poem...
Wonderful wite!

[Lana]

wow

[scorpion-red]

interesting piece

[LlamaLord]

Mental pressure can turn into physical pressure. Mental pain can turn into physical pain. You really showed how one can be affected by simply the emotion brought to them. Really nice piece. Good luck in my competition! :D Thanks for entering!

Austin D.

[The Dark Passenger]

so vivid and brave... so violent and yet so beautiful.
I love the way you've put these words together to create such a gorgeous flow made up of such blood thirsty words. breath taking.