The Castaways.

Song I wrote for when I felt alone.

Castaways

3 am and we're sitting on the bathroom floor

House of elegance with teenagers dressing up the foyer

Looks like a murder scene and everyone is their own culprit

Because nobody was forced to take a sip

 

The red wine looks like blood

Dripping from the side of the tub

No one kept compusure no one kept their focus

We yearned like a lush

Felt an adrenaline rush

We crashed and burned

We never learned.

 

Deficit of affection

Slightest bit of direction

Lost in all these problems

No one cares to solve them (2x)

 

Am I even worth a future?

Do I have my entire life to live

When I'm sitting here with bottles and cigs

 

All I want is a little pity

From the world, so s****y.

And nobody tries to hear me.

I never wanted the party

It just helps my heartache

When nobody is sober

And everyone sleeps over

Tends to bring us closer

Because we all have no one...

Reviews

[Michael.]

I like the on-off rhythm it had going on and how it described a story.
A few of the lines didn't feel quite right to me but a nice, depressing(xD)poem all the way through.

[Dilan Gray]

I really like this, I can see everything, all the images are beautifully painted with your words. You are a great writer!

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Beautifully written a really excellent write I love how I imagine the background music to your writing your truly skilled well done Asia xxxxxxx

i love lyric feel. it makes me want to know what kind of music it would be paired with. you have a talent for writting.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

wow this is so lyrically good---you write well