Your Eyes

I saw your eyes today

Today I saw your eyes

Breaking through the haze of pure confusion

Staring straight into my soul

 

Your eyes, they tell a story

But I don't quite understand

Although you were never one to show emotion

That was not carefully planned

 

My own pleading eyes

Frantic in their search

For any kind of answer

But your maze is too complex

 

I fail at finding answers

In your desperate, pained attempt

Creeping haze sparks thoughts back to seclusion

Please, I beg you, my gaze though not enough

 

Your eyes are clouding over

Please don’t leave me in the dark

Please, I am needy for translation

Through welling tears I plead, don’t leave me all alone

 

The haze begins to settle

Denser than before

My feeble pleas are nothing now

Your eyes, they are no more

 

Author's Note

Arg, I fail at structure.

Reviews

[Rya May]

I really like this it has great imaging I feel like im right there with you/this person. Seeing their tears fall. Very nice :)
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[Bran the Broken]

Who cares about structure? well, yeah, it could be organized a little more carefully...but the overall effect, the emotion, is overpowering, honest. It reminds me of looking into an elderly grandparent's eyes, perhaps after a stroke or something similarly debilitating....very raw, fresh grief.

[J.Black]

"Your eyes, they tell a story

But I don't quite understand

Although you were never one to show emotion

That was not carefully planned"

I thought it was pretty well written. I like what you have here and this is my favourite stanza.
I agree, eyes show the most emotion and when I cannot read a person I go insane!