Rainy Days

It was rainy today.

My ancient cloud friends used to spend their days

Floating blindly in their puffy haze.

But now they rush and buzz around the sky

leaving me to sit and wonder why.

I cannot think of anything to do

So I will sit beside the sky just blue,

And think of you.

Reviews

[...Relic...]

This is a pretty good poem. The commas at the end of each sentence could be taken out.

My ancient cloud friends used to spend their days
Floating blindly in their puffy haze.
But now they rush around the sky
leaving me to sit and wonder why.
I cannot think of anything to do
So I will sit beside the sky just blue,
And think of you.

Good first offering. Welcome to the site. :)

[Moose The Lesser]

Fixed! Thank you! Is there a specific reason for this, or is it just format?

[...Relic...]

Commas in the wrong place create a stilted feel. They make you pause where it's not needed.

[Gideon X. A. Elson]

Nice poem, I envisioned one daydreaming in the clouds. Then coming back to present moment. Resigning to daydream again perhaps on a lover now? Or perhaps just clouds.

[Ian Allison]

Really good use of words! Love it!