Compartment 114
Compartment 114
Charlie
Fly the plane
Rainy Days

Rainy Days

A Poem by Moose The Lesser
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It was rainy today.

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My ancient cloud friends used to spend their days
Floating blindly in their puffy haze.
But now they rush and buzz around the sky
leaving me to sit and wonder why.
I cannot think of anything to do
So I will sit beside the sky just blue,
And think of you.

© 2021 Moose The Lesser


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This is a pretty good poem. The commas at the end of each sentence could be taken out.

My ancient cloud friends used to spend their days
Floating blindly in their puffy haze.
But now they rush around the sky
leaving me to sit and wonder why.
I cannot think of anything to do
So I will sit beside the sky just blue,
And think of you.

Good first offering. Welcome to the site. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moose The Lesser

3 Years Ago

Fixed! Thank you! Is there a specific reason for this, or is it just format?
Relic

3 Years Ago

Commas in the wrong place create a stilted feel. They make you pause where it's not needed.



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Nice poem, I envisioned one daydreaming in the clouds. Then coming back to present moment. Resigning to daydream again perhaps on a lover now? Or perhaps just clouds.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Really good use of words! Love it!

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is a pretty good poem. The commas at the end of each sentence could be taken out.

My ancient cloud friends used to spend their days
Floating blindly in their puffy haze.
But now they rush around the sky
leaving me to sit and wonder why.
I cannot think of anything to do
So I will sit beside the sky just blue,
And think of you.

Good first offering. Welcome to the site. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moose The Lesser

3 Years Ago

Fixed! Thank you! Is there a specific reason for this, or is it just format?
Relic

3 Years Ago

Commas in the wrong place create a stilted feel. They make you pause where it's not needed.

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Hi. I am a bad writer. Random ideas often pop into my head, and I would like a place to write them down. If you enjoy them, that makes me incredibly happy. more..

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