Fire.

Words have been failing you.

 

You are more electric than Edison, can’t you see?

A spark, though seemingly insignificant, is pure potential.

The sparks that once sought your skin have faded,

Alone in the dirt, left to smolder into nothing.

 

I never understood the female clichés;

The reasons why words leave lips as lies

Do not satisfy my curiosity.

 

I have found fire:

Flames lick from the arms of my love,

From his lips are letters I comprehend,

His heart sets my soul aflame.

Can you not see?

 

Evolution is not meaningless:

It is directed as the tree drops her leaves in the fall,

Even as she knows they will be green come spring.

You left me lonely in winter,

Barren and cold,

Yet I have found the spring.

 

I have found the natural ebb and flow of a love undying,

And in the deep ocean of my soul I know:

This is not electricity.

This is real, not the artificial spark

Of telephone wire, of midair connections;

This is not the passion that flows

Only when the switch is flipped.

 

This is the emotion that exists

In the bottom of the sea,

In the sands of the desert,

In the sky, the earth,

The stars, the sun,

In the trees and in the leaves.

If you cannot see it,

Your eyes are failing you

As words have failed you;

They do nothing but fall on deaf ears,

As I think of my love,

Lying near the Nile.

 

As Gaia and Uranus belonged,

So I belong with him.

Reviews

[The Scanners See Sound]

I was never the biggest fan of love-themed anything. Whether it be music, poetry, film, or relationships.

Strangely enough, your prose is so, pardon the pun, poetic that I can look past the surface subject matter, and find more pertinent ideas within the expressive verse.

I barely know your work, but it has such a strong 'calling card' feel to it, that I can confidently say this piece is a-typical of you.

Trust me when I say that is a fantastic thing.


Oh....this is a silly complaint, but I would suggest you replace 'Edison' with Tesla.

Seriously, you ought to consider that.

[Hardik Aggarwal]

hi lydia....
nice work ......poem's theme is great !!!i must say !his is the emotion that exists
In the bottom of the sea,
In the sands of the desert,
In the sky, the earth,
The stars, the sun,
In the trees and in the leaves.
If you cannot see it,
Your eyes are failing you
As words have failed you;
They do nothing but fall on deaf ears,
As I think of my love,
Lying near the Nile.
..............................................................the best part and real essence of the poem !!! need summ changes...but yea dont mind okk!! im new !!!
keep it up !!
*hardik*

[St.Jimmy]

awesome piece really an awesome piece
it is the emotion that exists in the bottom of the sea, in the sands of desert, in the sky , in the earth etc. is the best part of your poem and puts life in it
lovely poem i must say
~Aaradhya

[Antonio Valentino]

Absolutely amazing, oh and wonderful too!

Brilliant writing Lydia.
Antonio

[Bridgett]

Absolutely amazing! You sure can write about love extremely well! Great piece!

[Bennett Logan]

Evolution is not meaningless:
It is directed as the tree drops her leaves in the fall,
Even as she knows they will be green come spring.
You left me lonely in winter,
Barren and cold,
Yet I have found the spring.

Bravo! The entire evolution of a year, of a life, in one stanza. This stood out to me the most once I finished reading the poem. You start out wondering about something you couldn't quite put your finger on, and you end with a strong resolution. Your imagery is strong, but I think a little bit of revision coud go a long way here. It's the same suggestion I always make, but take out any words or lines that you feel aren't absolutely necessary to the poem. Fantastic work as always, Lydia. Keep it up!

[Sarah]

Hey! I don't know if I sent a review already....I tried to post one and it said there was an error, so apologies if I sent this twice. >_>!!! I really loved this poem - it's beautiful, romantic, and full of great imagery and description. I loved the comparison between the "false" connection of electricity compared to that found in nature, and how you used this to symbolize real love compared to artificial. Brilliantly written, great job! :)