Prologue

            I turned to look at my mother who held my younger sister, Rachel. My mother smiled to my sister, Rachel. I stared at her. My father came into the room and smiled at the scene of my mother and sister. They gave their full attention to Rachel. I opened the door and left the room. I walked as fast as my feet could carry me. I opened the back door to our house. It seemed like my mother heard the squeak of the back door. I walked out to the yard. I looked around and found a large wolf standing a few yards in front of me. I stared at the wolf. My mother came out carrying Rachel. Rachel saw the wolf and cried. My mother screamed and my father ran out. The wolf stood there staring at me. I stared at the wolf back. My father picked me up and pulled me away from the view of the wolf. At that moment, the wolf ran away into the woods behind our house. My mother was crying and went back into the house crying with Rachel also crying. My father carried me in and placed me into my bed in my room. He went back down to calm my sister and mother. I fell asleep just as they stopped crying.

Author's Note

Ignore any grammar problems and please review.

Reviews

[Dean]

Grammar aside I found it an entertaining read. You have to deal with the flow of your naration or, like me, the reader will have to stop and reread areas to follow the flow you intended. I love that your main character is a woman and she is strong willed. I think it would add some more to the characters if you added some sence of feelings to her.
When she walks out the back door what does she feel when she sees the wolf waiting outside, does her brows furrow with frustration at seeing the animal knowing that its presence will cause problems if her family sees it?

[Art300]

Seems good so far.

[Calypso]

This was a good read and I just know the rest of the book will be good as well.