Dreams of A Girl

Dreams of A Girl

A Poem by Maria Tughu

When we grow as young

We meet our first love
and know it will last forever

Sometimes it does, Most of the time
We have to work at it and want it.

A woman wants true love
Promises that wont be broken
Someone to share things with

A man that treats her with respect
That gives his all
That is not afraid of letting people know, she is his

Someone that will be there
Through the bad times, as well as the good
Someone that says I Love you forever

That really means it
Someone honest and kind
That will protect her at all costs

That will be open to her
Give her a kiss or hug
No matter who is around

That will not walk away
When things get rough
Just stay and work it out together

An honest man gives a girl his heart
She will give him her soul
If she truly loves you

She will not make demands
Or be jealous of everyone
She will be loving and kind

He does not have to make much money
To make a girl happy
Just stand by her, being her man

A girl does not need a big house
She does not need a big ring
Or fancy clothes and big car

She just needs lots of kisses and hugs
Plenty of attention
Lots of good loving and you hold her hand

© 2016 Maria Tughu


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That is quite deep. Well, I suppose, you gotta work on your grammar. It would be great if you replace the word "that" by "who". And, in the last line, it must be "Lots of love and you holding her hand".
Anyway, your poem is full of feeling and has got simplicity, which makes it universal and easy-to-understand. Good piece. Keep writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Maria Tughu

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading I'm glad you enjoy :-)



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I noticed other people mentioning the "that" and "who" problem so I wont extend on it again. Instead I'll say that the theme is ageless and therefore easy to understand, be it for a guy or for a girl (might actually be educational for some guys so that's a great plus!) It's sweet, cute and simple so great work!
However, and it's only my personal opinion, I think that the flow is not quite there so maybe work on that?

Posted 5 Years Ago


The first thing I noticed was exactly what another reviewer shared; the use of the word "that" should be replaced with "who". "That" would describe a thing, whereas "who" describes a person. An example is "The hat THAT sits unmoving on the hallway hat rack" and "The man WHO decided to clean the dust off of the hat"

Posted 7 Years Ago


Much emotional poem filled with sorrow. I enjoy it. :-)


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Szhzia

Posted 7 Years Ago


Maria Tughu

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading! I am glad you enjoy it.
SZHZIA

7 Years Ago

You are welcome
This is such an deep write full of feelings. Much enjoyed

Posted 8 Years Ago


Maria Tughu

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading!
That is quite deep. Well, I suppose, you gotta work on your grammar. It would be great if you replace the word "that" by "who". And, in the last line, it must be "Lots of love and you holding her hand".
Anyway, your poem is full of feeling and has got simplicity, which makes it universal and easy-to-understand. Good piece. Keep writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Maria Tughu

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading I'm glad you enjoy :-)
I love this! Great message as I also love it when a guy gives me respect.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Maria Tughu

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your generous words. :-)

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Maria Tughu
Maria Tughu

Istambul, Turkey



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I am a girl of 25 year girl old from Turkey. I love to read and write romantic poetry. I much like to write on love relationship and life. You are most welcome to my poetic world. more..

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