people

people think they understand me,

and how I feel,

but they've only seen the surface ,

and only know whats unreal

they dont know me,

and dont know my true heart,

they dont know if this is the end or ,

just the beggining of the start

they think they know it all ,

like they know me

they think they know who I am ,

and how I came to be,

they believe in true love,

do I well...no

they believe in the god above,

do I?...kinda so?

they belive they understand,

do I?

no,

but I try

they tell me then your a liar,

they tell me then your a fake ,

they tell me then your a witch,

and we'll throw you in the lake

they act and they pretend like they have a heart and soul,

but if you want to know the truth their hearts are blacker than coal

they tell you their pure and innocent,

they lie and they decieve,

they'll tell you that you can trust them,

but you need to know whats up their sleeve,

their eyes burn with fire and their soals soak in evil,

their hands have engravements one what they believe is real,

I'll tell you the truth and I'll tell you no lie,

people understand you as much as they understand I,

were mysteries,

 were unknown,

our hearts must never be shown,

we reveal no weakness ,

and show only strength

cause in the race,

all that matters is the short or long length,

our race is long and hard ,

but our bodys will endure

our hearts though may fail,

but of that I'm unsure

 

Reviews

[Gandré]

This was a p sad personal poem, I felt vulnerability, but that made it so charming! you are so right, we never should reveal ourselves to anybody for people automatically take the change and find the Achilles sinew; I am sure you do it right :=). So sweet it iwas... I like it. Thanks for reading my small new eroticism. Be well.

[Marcybee]

Wow. I've never seen anything like this. It's soooo heart felt..hm.
Here's what I think:
It talks about the darkness in people's souls, and how they are so lost that they can't understand how you feel. But such emotion! Very cool.

[Emmie]

I've been sorta like this since I was little. Not revealing myself to anyone, afraid of showing my emotions to everyone. It's like that now still... nonetheless it was a great piece. Keep writng! =)

[Vague]

I liked this one.

I'll admit it was a teeny bit hard to read, but all in all you got your message across very effectively.

[AMetaphoricalSoul]

I kind of got lost in all the metaphors. comparing every single thing seems to make the poem lose its meaning. I kind of get where you're going with this but it's hard to stay focused without really concentrating
also the first half of the poem seems to have no sort of rythym (sp?) or if it does then it's too jumbled to tell

[SoHopeful]

I like this, I like the way you explained not only how "people" see you, but also how you see them. Everything is different on the outside than it is on the inside and people assume because they simply don't know or understand. I enjoyed how you got that message across. (At least to me anyway)