Scribble

Another careless piece

I won't suggest you love me
for my cosmos looks gorgeous to you.
It's just a vivid skin
over a costly vacuum.

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This reminded me of a quote from Marilyn Monroe who said, " Sometimes I feel like one of those Chinese dragons in the New Year parade, you know? All pretty frills and color on the outside but empty inside." Great read...short but powerful. F.

[moog-drika]

The quote I guess came from all the sufferings she had to go through. Sadly, most people are still like these dragons.
It's hard to see their true soul.

Anyway. Thanks so much for the positive words. Means a lot.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I really liked this poem because it challenges the superfluous layers of decoration (make-up, jewelry, tattoos and fancy clothes) so many try to apply as beauty when true beauty always comes from within. We are all unique and precious souls. But getting to know someone often isn't an easy task.

[Wyrn Tiger]

awe, this ones great, love it

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much. :D

[Arundass TP]

Powerful way of expressing through minimum lines. Good work

[moog-drika]

Thanks a lot. :D

[Mk.t.g]

Short but impactful! Loved it.
Mk.t.g

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much. :D

[Mk.t.g]

Your Welcome!!

[Ken Simm.]

Superb words and lines that cross the thoughts so memorably

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch for all the positive sprinkles. Made my day.:'D

[Coyote Poetry]

I adored the honest words dear Poet. When we dance into love. Can win, can lose. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I did enjoy this one.
Coyote

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for the compliment. It really means a lot.
And yes, dancing into love can be an adventurous ride.:D

[duff]

If you love me beautiful. If not I'm still a star. Your lines have plenty of attitude. Nice work.

[moog-drika]

Probably it needed some sprinkles of good attitude to make it sound stronger. Thanks a bunch for the praise. Means a lot.

[light and ashes]

I believe I can relate to these words. So eloquent and well said.

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for all the positive words. Made my day.:D

[light and ashes]

:D........

[Sami Khalil]

This was a splendid poem.
The allure of beauty, the feeling of love, the discovery of inner vacuum
Wowzy woooo!

[moog-drika]

Beware! The vacuum is gorgeous but costly :3
Thanks a bunch :'D

[Sami Khalil]

So true and well said. It is worth it. You are welcome.

[Betty Hermelee]

What is underneath this vivid is a vacuum…..nothing at all…which is usually the opposite of what we think…that it’s the inside that matters…clever piece…
Best, B

[moog-drika]

I still don't know whether this nothing is a good thing or bad.
Thanks so much for the positive words.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome!
Warmly, B