Tense

another careless write.

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Past, once held current time,

continued to move coyly 

and run into experiences: queer but ripe. 

The young past, once fancied future, grew,

as time casually took shape.

Present, the future past fancied, appears, 

it walks along with time, still current but in mellow shape.

It holds past and continues to move.

There is a break in the ignition of ripe experiences. 

Half is filled with veracious vintage, 

other half is sophisticated semi-novelty. 

The present hopes to meet a mature future

while imagining its nature.

Future will be showing up

with a hefty bundle of senior experiences. 

Ignition will have more breaks, 

some slices will be valiant vintage, 

some smart semi-novelty, 

some boisterous breakthrough.

Future will look at the past and present

to converse with time. 

Author's Note

so this is a very rough piece and something out of my comfort zone. I liked the rawness hence dared to post it. But I might modify it. There are many parts that need changes.

Reviews

[Neville]

cleverer than everer... I so like the way ya strung all three tenses into one poetic page... now you can sit back n relax... :)

[moog-drika]

thank you so much for taking a ride. Yep. sitting back and relaxing :'D

[Neville]

good to hear... :)

[AJNJ]

I like the sense of fluidity of time I got reading this. A sense of how deeply the past, present and future relate and indeed if you look at it objectively, the three are just adjacent on the continuum of time. So experiences become shared and even feel like they're running concurrently in the present! I wish we could travel both ways on the timescale though. What a master man would become of his destiny! Or perhaps master of his chaos? An interesting poem Moogdrika! Pen on!

[moog-drika]

I know time travelling is actually not possible but I keep on fantasizing about it. haha
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and for the compliment. So glad you like it. :'D

[AJNJ]

Fantasizing about great things can be very fulfilling. You're most welcome Moogdrika.

[Chris Shaw]

We can ponder a long time on the future. We can ponder and lose ourselves in past memories, but the present and now becomes history all too quickly. Maybe we should concentrate more on the now and live life to the full. I liked your play on words here and the thoughts they generated moog-drika. You title plays on this theme.

Chris

[moog-drika]

What a thoughtful review! I agree with every word you said. I always try to use this living in the present motto for myself but sometimes stuffs from both the past and future flash and make me pause. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. :'D

[Lorry]

I like the idea of past, present and future all being us in their now, then and when. I would like to get past present and future me in a room, discussing all the parts that make us us.
Probably past me would be too cool to talk with present and future me, present me would be looking at the state of future me and wondering what happened to make him look like that, and future me would be calling for a bedpan from the nurse.
This comes together really well and leaves me wondering, if I could choose, which one of me would i want to be. Past has energy, present has 5g network and future me looks like he goes shopping in his pyjamas.
Choices, choices 😀

[moog-drika]

hahaha that is surely a fun read. I guess my situation will be pretty same if I get past present and future me in a room. There will be some common things to talk about but at the same time it will be really different.
I love the last two lines. haha
Thank you so much for putting your thoughts. Love it.

[Lorry]

You're welcome.

[James Paranormal]

I love how poems with function have the perfect encapsulating endings, as this poem
"Future will look at the past and present / to converse with time about them."

Such a wonderful play on words, woven from beginning to end!

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for the praise. It really means a lot. :'D

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This is very experimental writing. Did you use automatic writing or other experimental technique . I was once tried black out text at newspapers but its not works well for me. Anyway here we got it fontaine of flowing thoughts, impression, expressions . Stimulating our imagination if we have one. It's like sitting at dark cinema and watch old Luis Bunuel movies. Exciting trip into base of own soul. I know i don't say much at my review but this is probably good how is gets. It was very moving psychedelic journey.

[moog-drika]

I guess it's more of a mix of automatic writing and experimenting. The very first draft was the former, then I kinda restructured it a little to give it a shape. I never tried blacking out text at newspaper but it sounds fun to me. So, I am gonna try it to see if it works or fails. haha
However, thank you so much for taking a ride to the write and adding a very deep vision to the piece. Means a lot :'D

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You welcome it's was pleasure to read. Your style is very free and creative .

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much. Reading your works also helps widen my thoughts. So thanks for that too! :'D

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One of the reason why I joined this site was to find simulate mind people. To share experience of writing and view in inner world. I am glad I find few people here like you and others. So thank you too.

[moog-drika]

Likewise :'D I'm so glad I got some great family-like people here like you and others :D