The lunarlight show

Tried etheree style for the very first time. It's still a rough sketch so if you have any suggestions for bettering it, you're most welcome. And not sure about the title as well. Urgh!

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Moonlight smudges over the pitch of stream

as hours blacken the mood with a beam.

With reflex dancing step by step,

and weather glinting its pep,

they widen their shadow,

to make their play flow.

Being eclipsed by

moon awry

warmth chills

thrills. 

Author's Note

In case if one doesn't know what Etheree is: it's a 10-line poem in which each line follows a syllable count that matches the line number.

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

Picked this one from the many you sent me, and enjoyed it. You and others have the patience to write in a careful, structured way, following a given form. I am hoplessly undisciplined and impulsive.A fine poem.

[moog-drika]

I absolutely understand. In fact I'm very much the same. I barely write anything on a specific format. Rather you will find almost all of my write-ups undisciplined and impulsive :D
By the way, thank you so much for the positive words. These really mean a lot :D

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words dear friend. I love when the moon is complete and the sky is lite-up. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[moog-drika]

I love that too. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. Means a lot.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Poet.

[Gaurav]

That's something very creatively written and adhered to...the usage of words, coupled with the form it carries, makes it a great read..keep it up

[moog-drika]

Yeah it was quite a tough one for me. But thank so much for the praise. So glad you like it :'D

[Chris Shaw]

You are brave attempting new structures. Never written one of these. There is some lovely poetic expression here moog-drika and I enjoyed some awesome imagery.

Chris

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for the compliment. Means a lot.
I kinda had fun in trying out this new style.

[Unspoken poet]

So very creative, I love the form as well. Awesome

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for the compliment. :D

[wordman]

creative with a shade of gray over looking the bay

[moog-drika]

ahh that makes it miss the beautiful display. Thanks so much anyway.

[wordman]

gray is beautiful over a bay