Gloomy gleam

Desolation smears my soul with a melodic torture,

stitches my face with tears while slitting my emotions.

You know how suffocation tastes?

I see gloom devouring gleam in one second 

and trying to vomit it out the very next second.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and amazing use of words my friend. The words bleed honest words and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry my friend.
Coyote

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for such a positive review. Means a lot ^_^

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome dear poet.

[Shoshana]

This poem gave me chills for reasons i simply cannot explain! You have so much talent :)

[moog-drika]

Ahh this review gave me thrills for a reason that i can actually explain. Thanks so much for all the positive words. So happy to have a new reader in my piece. ^_^

[Gee]

Line three I think you could drop the " like"
Good morning

[moog-drika]

haha Sure I can. Thank you so much :D
Actually I already did the moment after getting your advice.

[moog-drika]

And Good morning :D

[DAH]

Love this bit of Goth, this dark diction, this suffocation
with its bitter flavor, with its lost breath.

Bravo, Poet!
DAH

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for stepping into this dark image and sharing your thoughts. I definitely wanted to give such vibe so my job is done here. Haha
Thanks a ton for your positive words and making my day. :D

[DAH]

My pleasure!

[Vin]

Now please bring something to reviving inanimate souls. I'm sure you can do wonders without the darker side as well
LOVE

[moog-drika]

I guess I have spent more time in reviving dark inanimate souls. I feel I am not good in expressing positive stuffs like I am in observing them. But since you have expressed it, I will surely come up with something that will revive inanimate soul in more of a positive way. Thanks so much for this inspiration

[Vin]

Wow!! I will really appreciate that. Please feel free to write if u need any help or motivation with it.
Conversations do help in writing.

LOVE

[moog-drika]

Yes it absolutely does help in writing. Thank you so much. I already feel motivated. And if I need more I may bother you haha :'D
*lots of love*

[Vin]

yes, I would love a collaborative writing :)

[moog-drika]

That's great :D

[wordman]

your words paint a vivid emotional story,i would not want to dwell in

[moog-drika]

At least you took a trip to the depiction which means a lot to me. So I dont want anything else. Haha Thanks so much :'D

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Jibey]

You cleverly mix together images that create a striking effect - 'smears my soul', 'stitches my face', 'slitting my emotions', the taste of suffocation, 'gloom devouring gleam'...

The words convey a feeling of choking depression, and its painful discomfort, and persistent grip.

Maybe writing the words is a cathartic process, helping to 'vomit it out'. I hope so.

[moog-drika]

Thanks a ton for "smearing my soul" with your positivity! Although depression sometimes makes you write your emotions up, but I agree that writing helps vomiting out all the negative feelings. So, yeah it indeed is a cathartic process. I'm so glad you could sense that. Thanks so much

[Chris Shaw]

Wow, these lines were dark. I actually felt I was suffocating as I read them, then I looked at your artwork. I never look at posted images until after I have read the poem. I can understand why I felt the way I did. You do darkness well.

Chris

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for travelling to the portrayal of this writeup. I think my job here to give a vibe of suffocation has been accomplished. Thanks a lot for making my day :'D

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome moog-drika. You accomplished what you set out to do. Job done. :)

[moog-drika]

Aww *lots of love* ! ^_^

[Chris Shaw]

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