Gloomy gleam

Desolation smears my soul with a melodic torture,

stitches my face with tears while slitting my emotions.

You know how suffocation tastes?

I see gloom devouring gleam in one second 

and trying to vomit it out the very next second.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Perfectly nonchalantly gory. What a juxtaposition between the matter-of-fact tone & the vivid blatancy of your message! This is pretty much how I feel about everything these days, ever since I read that 1000+ people in the USA are dying each & every day of covid while the Trump minions freak out over athletes who kneel during the pre-game national anthem becuz their Lord & Master told them to throw up this smoke to hide his failures. I'm so sick of the lies & deception & destruction, the last two lines of your poem taste like tiramisu to me (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[moog-drika]

I feel the same about all the dirty politics exist worldwide. I don't even try to understand these because I know they will soil my mind. I understand and feel how you feel.
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. So glad to know that you got a dessert from such oxymoronic-like write. Lots of love

[Robert Trakofler]

this sounds like something someone would write about today in the clutches of quarantine:/ I think of the taste of suffocation, as that metallic taste one gets from an adrenaline rush. darkness and light are symbiotic creatures they don't exist without the other and in each the opposites are plainly found if you squint the right way. A short but sweet scrawl sketch

[moog-drika]

Wow! You just added a different meaning to the piece. It absolutely gives a vibe of adrenaline rush we are getting thanks to quarantine. Thank you so much for your interpretation. Loved it. ❤️

[Carola]

hi moog-drika,
i'm not into dark poetry or writing 'cos i normaly find it depressing.
but this poem you wrote is truly amazing.... an eating/bulimia analogy with soul emotion wow!
cheerio carola

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for your interpretation! I know dark poetry does make you a bit depressed just like how it made me. That's why I started writing bright poetry to help me feel positive. Hope you like them. Thanks so much again for the praise. It means a lot.

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Simple and to the point. Nice!

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much ❤️

[light and ashes]

I think this is one of my favorite things I've ever read.
Every single line could stand strong as a poem on it's own, but together it's a masterpiece.

This is what I've been feeling lately. No one else seems to have been able to sum it up in such an eloquent way.

[moog-drika]

To be honest. I didn't write this poem very seriously. This was rather like a doodle to me. Thank you so much for your opinion about the piece. I feel so motivated now.

[light and ashes]

I'm so glad! You're an amazing writer! Truly a one of a kind!

[SkinlessFrank]

touches all the senses with dread...sensational

[moog-drika]

Hope you enjoyed the dread! Thank you so much for your compliment! ❤️❤️

[likhon]

I am astonished how you write so good?! Btw, if you don't mind...tumi dhakar kothaay thako? Just curious

[moog-drika]

Haha, I would like to read your write-up as well. And ami Dhakar Mohammadpur e thaki. What about you?

[moog-drika]

oh and thanks so much for the praise

[likhon]

I am more into writing stories. Aspiring novelist you could say. But I have a short story you could read. That was quite well received by my friends XD . I will give it to you for a read. Btw, I am thinking of making a habit of reading your poems often. Firstly because they are wonderful. And secondly you're a fellow countryman :p

[likhon]

Wow. Maybe we could meet someday and talk about your poems! Ami puran Dhaka thaki. Currently doing my masters at brac university. Which university are you in?

[Leslie Philibert]

This has a Plathian like sadness that reminds me of her last poems,addressing the second person in L3 gives it a very tough style, well written, good job!

[moog-drika]

I tried envisioning her poems several times when I read them but failed miserably. And this upsets me so much.
Thanks a bunch for the positive words. It means a lot.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very intense and sad piece filled with pathos. It reads well in a voice of someone who feels very disheartened and lost with no control.

[moog-drika]

Well, I won't deny its background story. Guess my piece can scream it out too loud to unmask that. Thanks a lot for the compliment.

[B. C. Carlson]

It was very shocking to read this poem. Not in a bad way - I think that is what you were going for. "I see gloom devouring gleam in one second." That was my favorite line - it reminds me of bipolar disorder. The words that you chose are very visceral. Thanks for sharing

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for your words. I'm glad that I managed to get out of my complicated mind that went too deep while penning it down. Hahha.