Indigo

I don't know why I love playing with the sky so much :3

The sky was caramelized,

to produce a discerning mirage on its skin.

The breeze was crispy:

it added a fierce flavor to the scenario.

 

Mouth of that ravenous seashore was filled

with layers of licit ocean.

It was not a vanilla reflection,

it rather had the skin of tender sky.

 

I tried to make a drawing of their subtle conversation.

With a brittle heart, I sighed.

Damn! It was heavy.

Reviews

[¿]

Do you love to see the indigo sky? I love it when the sky seems so clear without any cloud obstacles and it feels like as if the sky reaches somewhere more higher than it is...and the blue colour of it gets deeper....but can't look at that scene for too long since it hurts my eyes and neck....but I love to gaze at that! (Being silly, no? )
I actually love the first two lines of the second stanza...who else could paint it that way like you did!....I'll tell you why i feel the oceans are really illicit, because they can and do invade any place and connect to thousands of rivers....and none can stand against them....we've let them roam so free!....
Oh you made me say so much today.... I literally thank you for writing this....
Be blessed and cool and safe and happy, always ;)

[moog-drika]

I barely get to look at the sky because you know, half of the urban stuffs ends up covering it. And living around in such places where you see nothing but building is so painful that it's hard to evem express. Seems like you got all the opportunity to enjoy the essence of nature. This makes me miss my old times. at least I used to get enough time to spend with such beauties. However, you made me say about a lot of things too haha. and Thanks so much for your interpretation. I genuinely loved it. :'D

[¿]

Dhaka! Been there 3 years ago...my goodness, I was sweating in the car even though twas December month :( ...I can feel your pain totally...
For now, you're welcome ;)

[rashmi]

This is such a beautiful write up! Absolutely in love with it

[moog-drika]

Umm, well are you talking about the comment or the poetry? Haha

[rashmi]

Poetry ofcourse 😊

[moog-drika]

Haha thank you so much ❤️❤️❤️

[duff]

That first line is dynamite. Boom it goes off and has the reader wondering what could be next after that awesome intro. Beautiful lines and I'm a fan of your work. Well done.

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts as well as for the compliment. The piece sometimes makes me get lost in the imagery.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

This is beautiful,
thanks for entering this into my competition, good luck

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much! ❤️

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful painting and wonderful words dear poet. The sea and the sky. True artwork for us to cherish. I loved how you described the clouds. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for the praise. It means a lot.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my dear friend.

[Robert Trakofler]

Oh how I hate it when I cant portray something well enough to give it justice like a painting or a poem it is only a facsimile of its true reflection sometimes I feel as if this is the never ending sentence of an artist but we still must try

[moog-drika]

There are such poetry and painting that doesn't need words to explain but needs what we feel about it and how we imagine it. As you have given it life in your thoughts which means a lot for me, I thank you for this. :D :D

[Abhishek Asthana]

Short but is written with some mesmerising effects... Fair emphasis is paid on nature and could have involved that part in loud character.., Random and deep emotions are showcased very well in this piece... Wonderful write... Keep writing !!

[moog-drika]

I love to talk about nature because it deserves all the attention and care. I am so glad that the piece managed to stir your mind. Thank you so much for your interpretation. :'D

[likhon]

The poem is too deep for my small brain :v but you are a gifted poetess moog-drika

[moog-drika]

ahahahha bepar na. I too dont get my writeups sometimes. Thanks so much :'D

[likhon]

Omg! Fellow Bangladeshi!!! Aren't you?

[moog-drika]

Yup :3 ...

[Jibey]

This read like a dramatic painting converted into words... I was struck by your choice of words - the 'caramelized sky', the 'mirage on its skin', the 'crispy' breeze, the 'licit' ocean, the 'skin of tender sky'... your words created both the visual impression of the sky and the mood and atmosphere it stirred within you as you looked and sketched in words... Definitely one to hang in the gallery.

[moog-drika]

It gives me such a pleasure to see you getting entertained through my thoughts and writeups. Your review does color my sky with motivation. Thank you so much for this. You have no idea how much it helps me feel positive. Thanks a ton!

[Relic]

I read your replies below. Isn't it funny how the sky and nature become clearer when they're not around as much? It must be a desire that shapes ideas and images.

Great poem, moog.

[moog-drika]

I long for nature and sky and I am someone who is always up for the place that will show the plays of nature. Thank you so much for giving it a new meaning with an unresolved question. Loved it! Haha

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Lovely imagery, but somehow I feel you are missing indigo sky and seashores. Some unfulfilled wishes I guess. Anyway Nicely written.

[moog-drika]

one of the major disadvantages of living in town with full of buildings and skyscrapers. I miss nature and its true color. Thanks so much for the review. :'D

[Amada]

I remember a dialogue of the movie Robot 2.0 "This is beyond science"

[moog-drika]

Haha Haven't watched it yet. So I guess I won't understand the meaning behind it? :3