The Bones of Death

Breath began to get corroded 

drilling its nightmare into sunrise.

The spine rumbled while letting 

        thunderbolt roll the typhoon.

It stood strong itself with a fractured heart.

Hope was still throbbing, yet bleeding. 

Reviews

[CA Anurag Sharma]

So much written in few words. Very nicely written..

[moog-drika]

Thanks a lot for your precious review :'D

[Leslie Philibert]

This is an excellent poem, finely written with excellent metaphors, well balanced with line length.One of the best poems I have read here...

[moog-drika]

This review surely gave me a different pleasure. So glad that the piece took you to its world. Thanks so much for all the positive words. They mean a lot. :'D

[Cult Barbie]

Such an impactful closing line. Really seals the passage.

[moog-drika]

It's this positive review that keeps on motivating me for writing stuffs. thank you so much for expressing your thoughts. :'D

[Onlyme]

No matter what pain and suffering we are dealt with. The heart will overcome with determination and love and faith to go on.

[moog-drika]

Optimism does shoo away all the pain. It's a mysterious medicine.

[Onlyme]

So very true.

[¿]

The last line triggered a solid bullet of a true situation...
This heart seems to be hurt badly...something lethal has hit it!....Almighty's tremendous creation "heart" still stands strong..
Great shot read, moogdha! :)

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much hun for your interpretation. So glad you explored the thought and reviewed it so beautifully. :'D

[¿]

You're warmly welcome!! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"with a fractured heart."
I like this..and carry on, we must, despite everything. Powerful use of words here. Nice write.

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch for all the positive words. They do mean a lot. :'D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we die emotionally when love beats down our heart...i like how this is portrayed here...few lines, deep meaning...less is more.

j.

[moog-drika]

This is how death shows its presence in various forms. Thanks so much for stepping into the world of the piece and sharing your thoughts. Made my day.

[Amada]

Nicely written poem though your words scared me a little bit

[moog-drika]

Ahh I understand, I went through the same feelings when I penned it down. :'D

[Coyote Poetry]

The words, hard, direct and honest. You made the reader feel the words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for the positive words. That meant a lot!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. A powerful poem written.

[wordman]

wow,almost scary,,from dust we came,to dust we go

[moog-drika]

I literally stepped into somewhere really dark :'D Thanks haha!

[wordman]

you`re welcome