Innocent Inequity

#wewantjustice

His assuasive touch, 

brought a scarlet splash out of trinket

and then, 

mishap served,

those freshly cooked foods

lying down on the busy skin of street.

Sun, 

rose to spill its howling light 

to bother her in supper-time 

but failed. 

Sun, 

had been gorgeously liquidated to set, 

or had been adored with tear-shell 

to darken atrocities, 

-to brighten atrocities.

The head of wheels, an absolute innocent

graces the innocence of throne.  

Throne, the most unerring being 

had her grotesque meal with satisfaction, 

because those foods 

  weren't meant to be kept as leftovers.

Author's Note

breathing in one of the most safest countries :)

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

beautifullly written sorry for the belated review and judging. thanks for being understanding, thanks for entry into my competition.

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for the compliment.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

a dark harsh reality depicted in words. Nicely written...

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for the compliment. It means a lot!

[Onlyme]

The injustice of the rich against the poor. That causes so many deaths in this cruel world. Nicely penned.

[moog-drika]

This is so true. breathing on this earth feels like hell itself. Thanks so much dear.

[Onlyme]

My pleasure.

[The Twin Arenas]

This is really great. One of my favorites of yours, I think.

[moog-drika]

Thanks a lot. It really made my day :'D

[Simone Davis]

Too me it's like you've written two poems in one.... Divine

[moog-drika]

is it like you got 2 different interpretations from it that made you say so? haha thanks so much for stepping inside the depiction. :D

[Simone Davis]

First it made me think of grief of loosing someone when you use 'him' and the part of lying skins of street, and their failed life then about the beauty of richness in food almost like day and night good and bad. Sorry could of got it completely wrong x

[moog-drika]

obviously not. I love to collect new meanings from readers for my poems. I'm so happy that I got 2 more. Rather your visions made me think of my poems in completely a different way. Thanks a lot :D :D

[¿]

I guess this one is bit bout the ongoing protest in our country, no?! :)
I can be wrong also...
But this poem does speak much louder for justice as it's being ignored since years uncountable....well not in a particular place but in the whole living world...
You always pen down something absolute and unique stunning gal....! :)
Why do I feel that author's note is a mock... but it makes sense now ;)

[moog-drika]

I couldn't stop myself to speak about it. But you cannot say anything against the power right? so here you go. I have put all the sweet stuffs about our sovereignty. I am lucky enough to observe such beautiful condition, hence poured out my feelings. Thanks so much pretty for stepping into the write and understanding it. I knew you would get it better. Thanks a lot :'D and yes stay safe in this amazing country. Ki ar bolbo. Bhasha nai. -_-

[¿]

Gal I did drip tears while reading that article in the newspaper....Gratitude to those drivers!!
read moreGal I did drip tears while reading that article in the newspaper....Gratitude to those drivers!!
No power cares until you come up on the "Rajpoth"....so...
Hope situationshe will get better....can't guess if anything else can be done!.....You too keep safe in this safest country.... you're heartedly welcome :)

[moog-drika]

it's completely alright pretty. I understand. I'm in the same situation. But we cannot show ourselves weaker. I albeit don't think that the situation will change because we are just trying to make it to the other end in the escalator facing the opposite direction. :'(

[¿]

😖and it hurts....Take care...and G'midnight! :)

[moog-drika]

aww, G'morning :D

[Gaurav]

Its a mysterious tale of what you intent to tell. When i read your descriptions below, i got to understand the hidden meaning in more subtle manner. I hope authorities look at this issue, while citizens drive safely and not rash, and all get well with time.

[moog-drika]

Exactly, I avoided using direct words intentionally, because I tried to make it a little sarcastic. Thanks so much for your support. It really works as a strength for us. :'D

[Chris Shaw]

Dear moog-drika. I am not entirely sure what you intended to convey in your lines. I have to say though I was picking up on violence and blood spill. May be it is to do with the loss of innocence that comes so readily in some parts of the world. Thank you.

Chris

[moog-drika]

Yes dear, I have given a little hint with the lines like: lying down on the busy skin of street' and 'head of wheels' that simply mean road accident. The number of such accidents has increased and we even lost some students just for the drivers who don't drive safely on road. We are even protesting for a safe road against the police and the government (because they never took any step to make traffic rules and laws more strict) some drivers who don't have licence are driving with freedom, some are driving with alcohol. And when we raised our voice against such incidents, we started facing trouble since it became a political issue. Hence, I wrote this poem on this incident. To just let the world know about our situation.