My vicious halos

1. 

Spice of violet,

was stroked with a proud hubris

to crown cosmic win

 

2. 

the sloth’s breath moves with

a little inertia of 

indigo, for null.

 

3. 

bluish bitterness

with squeaky poise

why does envy possess them all?

 

4. 

clamor stares at me

for enthralling green. -the burp 

of greed never ends

 

5. 

drink my realism.

yellow yells for gluttony

to devour my root. 

 

6. 

sun, tastes like orange

diffuses a coppery 

smell to scorch wrath’s meat.

 

7. 

it's me who I crave,

I lust after reflection,

to sense my red wine.

Author's Note

Played with some colorful crimes

Reviews

[Jibey]

I like the idea of playing with colorful crimes, and the 7 deadly sins have some attractive elements - a rainbow edge, you might say. Some more scattered and wicked thoughts:

1. Male pride and prowess stroked... leading to star burst... Nice
2. Lazy days, blue thoughts... Slow is nice too
3. Scratchy squeaks of protest...jealousy now a blue-eyed goddess?
4. Nature's demands, stirring the guts, insatiable.
5. Wild with desire, the golden shower shoots from its earthy spring
6. Hot burning rays of pain and pleasure assail the senses
7. Tasting the crushed fruit's juice, a mirror selfie, with hints of longing.

I love you for reviving my inanimate soul.

[moog-drika]

Ahh! the best one-line interpretations of the write I can say. I think this is what happens when your inanimate soul revives, you actually can step inside metaphors and explore the world for giving it a different meaning.
Thank you so much. I love you for presenting me such beautiful review.

[Relic]

Well, I read this a bunch of times and I like it but despite some possible help below, I need an interpreter. :) I've seen this type of writing many times before but I'm not sure what you'd call it? Abstract? Symbolism?

I realize hubris means pride, but isn't the first deadly sin lust? Hmm? I may need more time with this. haha.

[moog-drika]

Well I haven't followed the sequence of those 7 vices. So, you will find it kinda jumbled up haha.read moreWell I haven't followed the sequence of those 7 vices. So, you will find it kinda jumbled up haha.
As far as 'what I would call it?' is concerned, well you can call it anything, I have left this option open for everyone. haha

[m3lody mae]

Oh wow, this is so good....most enjoyable read

[moog-drika]

thanks so much for the compliment. It means a lot. :'D

[SleeplessVolcano]

What a lovely haiku family!

However, number 3 does not quite follow the 5 - 7 - 5 syllable count.

Great poetry :)

[moog-drika]

haha I know. I tried a lot to work on it. but I kinda liked it that way. so kept it as it is. I'll try to make it a haiku if I can though. But thanks so much for the praise. :'D

[SleeplessVolcano]

Yeah, I know what you mean....like those near-perfect diamonds....the flaw it has makes it more beautiful...:)

[moog-drika]

ahh you got that right. Thanks a bunch :'D

[M@]

Very interesting read. It is certainly intriguing. I don't understand the "technical theory" behind the haiku.

But I enjoyed the read non the less

[moog-drika]

The only reason I like haiku is that you can speak a lot using lesser words. Otherwise I dont follow the rule either haha. It's like why restrict yourself to rules especially in the world of thoughts and imageries. But yeah I love using lesser words to paint my write and collecting different interpretation from my readers. I find it fun. Thanks so much for the positive words. ^_^

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the haiku like compact verses, coupled with the anti-consumption theme transported with key words like crave and gluttony. So a fine poem, well written !

[moog-drika]

This was indeed a little attempt of haiku, except for the third one. But I'm so glad that you grabbed the gist of the verses. Thanks so much for stepping inside the images and reviewing on them. Means a lot. :D

[Onlyme]

Green with envy on this poem. Magnificent. Lock me up and throw the keys away.

[moog-drika]

Thanks a lot sweetheart for those warm words. Hope my writeups always captivate you this way. 'Hugs' :D :'D

[¿]

Best part is when I actually got it....I was totally mesmerised by the crimes!
You played with colourful crimes brilliantly....the 4th one was my reread....I enjoyed reading that!!
Hmm...your name absolutely suits and fits you...you're stunning!! ;)

[moog-drika]

Ahaha thanks so much pretty for taking a tour to my write and playing with those colorful crimes. and honestly that's my favourite line too. :3

[¿]

Same pinch😌!!
You're heartedly welcome :)

[moog-drika]

😁😁😁😁😁

[¿]

Good Midnight btw🌃

[moog-drika]

haha, good morning. and stay safe.

[wordman]

lol,you have broken the law,but i liked it

[moog-drika]

Law?? what law?? :D

[wordman]

the color law

[moog-drika]

ohh hahaha yeah! laws are meant to be broken :3
thanks so much anyway. :D

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Chris Shaw]

I am loving your rainbow writes, they truly are spectacular. I am wondering why you used the word vicious in your title? You have created a little poem for each one of the seven colours.

Chris

[moog-drika]

Though I usually prefer to stay quiet when it comes to explaining anything about my write ups since I love collecting all the meanings from the visitors who step into each of the canvases and express their experience. I'm so glad to have your presence into each of them and hear those warm words from you. :'D
As for the question, well it was my little attempt to show the seven deadly vices through the colors. Just tried to jumble them up.
Thanks so much for the warmth. It really means a lot. ^_^

[Chris Shaw]

You are very welcome and thank you for explaining.

[moog-drika]

It's completely my pleasure :D