Poor Nemesis

A slurp of dusk, taken,

 with a few herbs of vibgyor.

Auguries were being spattered.

The claret of fortune,

      -had a minty hunch.

We watch 'disfigured zephyr',

roaring regularly.

Such a neat show.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm not good at understanding highly nuanced writing, so I'm uncertain of your overall message. But that does not deter me from admiring your amazing word crafting. I get the idea you describe that mysterious time of gloaming (dusk) & I love the way you use these phrases: "slurp of dusk" . . . "claret of fortune" . . . "a minty hunch" . . . "roaring regularly" . . . dynamic details described in sensory terms! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[moog-drika]

Well, I think the piece is pretty meaningless. Rather I'm gathering up all the meanings from the reviews so I can understand the message of my visualization. And since you have bestowed me one, I'm viewing the whole write-up differently.
Thanks a bunch for all the positive words and pointing out the parts that entertained you. Made my soul happy.
*lots of love*

[barleygirl]

Hundreds of times I've written in a review about not understanding, but never have I ever gotten a reply like this! (fresh & honest) Love it!

[Tea Lee-Anne]

Not really understanding all of this. When i finished reading all i could think was "huh?"

[moog-drika]

haha it's okay. Mind is a complex entity :3
Thanks so much for stopping by :'D

[Carla]

Beautiful poem in such beautiful words. It's amazing, well done

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much :'D

[Gaurav]

the wonders of nature and its never-ending ability to surprise us. You capture it beautiful.

[moog-drika]

Just like you do with your write. Thanks so much for traveling into the piece and voicing your views on it. Means a lot. :'D

[Gaurav]

Thank you...and also i have noticed that your vocabulary is very strong..once i had asked you about the meaning of tetra-identity..its was an invention

[moog-drika]

You remember it? that's amazing! and as for invention, well isn't it something that we all do with our thoughts? Just like you invented a strong rhythm to show how the dark world actually looks like. Loved that piece.

[Gaurav]

Yes that was awesome - tetra-identity!! yes, it's what the goal is - to continue challenging the usual course of brain.
Thank you so much.

[moog-drika]

It's all my pleasure :'D

[Sami Khalil]

Such a neat show and poem. Thank you for sharing.

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for those positive words. Means a lot :D

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome Drika...

[Phill Oz O'fee]

A wonderfully metaphoric expression of observation and interpretation of how the 'gods' were predicting futures yet to be … interesting write! :-)

[moog-drika]

This is how life floats. Thanks so much for stepping inside the depiction. :D

[Onlyme]

Wow, great images held within. very well done, enjoyed it a whole lot.

[moog-drika]

You are such a sweetheart. I always get positive vibe from your review that inspires me in writing down stuff. I'm so glad that the piece got you inside the picture and entertained you with the vision. Thanks sooo much Dee. :D

[The Twin Arenas]

Dusk is such a slurp. Nicely done.

[moog-drika]

Haha yes I guess. Thanks a lot for taking a sip of it. :D

[Chris Shaw]

Clever. I had to think and then I remembered ROYGBIV, red, orange, yellow, green, blue, indigo and violet. All the colours of the rainbow. You had something special to look at. I pictured a rainbow after a storm. Nice work.

Chris

[moog-drika]

This is really a delight for me that the piece got you into colourful environment. Thanks so much for stepping into the vision. It really means a lot :D

[Chris Shaw]

Clever writing, and much enjoyed.

[wordman]

sounds like night magic at it`s best

[moog-drika]

hahah how did it taste?? :D

[wordman]

like moon beams

[moog-drika]

haha thanks so much :D

[wordman]

my pleasure