Smokescreen

The mighty maze arrives 

   for the sake of those with feeble anonymity 

Turmoil has always been a thief 

but an oppressed one. 

The mighty maze arrives

  for the sake of those with genial immorality

A packet of pleonexia was certainly a good buy

 -a loaf of notes being a tasty snack.

Needy seed.

The mighty maze did arrive

  but reconstructed the anarchy.

Reviews

[ElizaB]

Thank you for entering your poem into my competition.

I really enjoyed the lines:
'Turmoil has always been a thief
but an oppressed one'.

Often, we are drowning in our own oppression and cannot see a way out. We are wordless, lifeless and (as you so nicely put it) trapped in a 'maze' of the mind. You convey this all in a mere eleven lines! Each of them well crafted and even more thought provoking than the next.

[moog-drika]

Exactly, we feel like trapped in this system. And this write tried to depict many of the dimensions.
although it gets its meaning only when my reviewers step inside the picture, otherwise it remains just as a pointless write. And It feels like a delight to get such an amazing interpretation from you. Thanks so much for the visit. It really means a lot. :D

[Mahesh Mehta]

Amazing use of inspiring words -- bitter but truth of life

[moog-drika]

thank you so much for those precious words :'D

[CLR9]

You can give life to inanimate beings?

I have the coin if you can show me such powers...

[moog-drika]

haha well i do that through my writing. why don't you read one and check out yourself.

[CLR9]

Dang. Can I bring my dead cat back if I read your poetry to him?

[moog-drika]

nope won't work. do metaphors work in real life? i don't know :3

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The contrast of donated bounty disguising the avarice intentions of the giver certainly ignites the imagination of the reader - well delivered poetical share ... nice one! :-)

[moog-drika]

what a great brief given in just one line. Thanks so much :'D

[Ruth]

This leads me down many avenues...complex yet grounded somehow, interesting combination :)

[moog-drika]

Thanks a lot :D

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this too, have to admit I`m not sure what pleonexia is, good use of alliteration, a powerful write
that encourages work from the reader

[moog-drika]

Well I have recently heard the word somewhere, it means extreme greed for something. So I thought to use it in a piece. But thanks so much for visualizing it.
It means a lot.

[Haley]

i would love to know the inspiration behind this piece

[moog-drika]

some unclear thoughts were circulating around my mind, tried to draw them out. I would love to know the depiction that the piece has shown you. I'm still looking for its meaning. :D

[Haley]

i had to rack my brain. there was a lot of complexity to this. it was one of those poems where i had to go back and read a few times in order to soak in the feelings and words that were depicted. tt

[Haley]

i kept going back to "the mighty maze" because that's what it felt like. i started thinking about the title of your poem and what it meant to me. my mind kept coming back to human beings and this innate gluttony or avarice that we have for what we believe has value, like money or power or food or anything really. my favorite line was "turmoil has always been a thief but an oppressed one."

[moog-drika]

Because mind is a complex illusion itself! it never lets you show a clearer picture. Although I never confine my pieces to a single meaning.
The picture that I have visioned from your interpretation does give a light to my unclear thoughts. And now I'll be able to connect the dots from it.
Thanks so much for explaining them so beautifully. It really gives me a different delight when my readers interpret my meaningless write up to give them a meaning, I'm glad to get one from yours. Thanks so much again, it really means a lot! :D

[Haley]

aw any time, love. i'm just glad that my all over the place explanation and insight was helpful. xD

[moog-drika]

yes it was related to avarice and your insight was indeed helpful. :'D