Pour Please

A Story by Tara♥Undefined♥

My very ever first haiku wat do you think

The rain falls down hard,

always sings to me in sleep,

Music to my ears.

© 2010 Tara♥Undefined♥

Author's Note

I wrote a haiku. it was easier than i thought it would be but it was still hard to fit the 5 ,7 ,5 pattern

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deeps

This is awesome

Posted 14 Years Ago

Subjective Sanity

It's great. It actually sounds a lot more like a true haiku than any of the ones I write. The subject is very traditional. It's beautiful!

Posted 14 Years Ago

Mary	it is cool... :) Posted 14 Years Ago it is cool... :) Rating /100

Ashes

The word arrangement is a bit clunky and harsh (i.e. the second line's sentence order was a bit awkward even for a haiku), but over all it's very good for a first try, and pretty darn good in general.

Posted 14 Years Ago

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Added on February 27, 2010
Last Updated on February 27, 2010

Author

Tara♥Undefined♥

canton, OH

About

I am Savannah! Heello!!!^^ I love writing(obviously) I love to sing and dance and stuff. I like the rainy days better than sunny ones and Im crazy too. Well, Idk wat else to tell you.. more..