Truth

 

Running,

 

Running through the trees in the dark, cold, night.

Feeling the brisk air caress my skin.

What true joy a feeling of escape could bring me.

I had left all that hurt me behind and burned it in the back of my head.

 

All is gone.

 

Now true power can take me over and make me pure.

Feelings deep inside me are waiting to explode.

The farther I go into the vast trees,

 the more its true beauty pulls me in.

The breeze and the leaves wrap around me and purify my soul.

Nature is wrapping me in its sweet embrace.

My face,

filled with pain,

 begins to fade to a smile,

 and a joyous tear strolls along my soft cheek

 as I realize I am safe.

 

I am bliss.

 

I am true.

 

 

Author's Note

PLeaase review it. Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[qaralynn]

good work!

[Mary]

i could see this,good job!!!! I liked it:)

[Millionth Muse]

Nicely written... I like the imagery, and the way that you used "feeling words" to really draw me in as a reader. Certain lines, like /I had left all that hurt me behind and burned it in the back of my head/ were really moving.

My suggestions, would be: First, get rid of most of the periods at the ends of the lines, they tend to throw the reader off. A publisher once told me that periods should be used more sparingly than any othe form of punctuation. Only use commas where you want the read to "pause" as they read. For instance...the last two lines "I am bliss" and "I am true" don't need punctuation. Of course, this is a stylistic thing, and some peole will disagree, but I'm just going by what I've been told by professors and publishers who have accepted my work. Second, I think you could dig a little deeper with some of your imagery.

Overall...this has great potential, as do you as a poet.