Evanescent Mist

Beautiful poem! Eloquent words- haunting imagery and great metaphor use. Would suggest you use commas instead of semi- colons at the end of first & fourth lines, and insert "so" before "rapidly" so th

Don't be a mist for me,

One which vanishes so rapidly

That even a light wind can burn off easily.

Your evanescent ways,

You just like the thrill of the chase

Now from your fog, I'll avert my gaze.

Author's Note

It's my first time to share my writings, kindly let me know what I'm missing.
Thanks so much! :)

*disclaimer: not very good in grammar

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Beautiful poem! Eloquent words- haunting imagery and great metaphor use. Would suggest you use commas instead of semi- colons at the end of first & fourth lines, and insert "so" before "rapidly" so that the next line continues the flow. Would also end last two lines with periods. These are minor fixes. You have much talent and I encourage you to keep writing!

[Monalissa]

Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate it. :)

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Very easy flow . Sound like noble song from 18 century. You make wonderful job with this.

[Monalissa]

Thank you so much!

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You very welcome it's great poem. Keep writing