Sleep Gauze

The butterfly takes a nap

Did I talk in my sleep?
I dreamt so vivid...

The words flowed
out of me, I repeated
them against your
smile, a whisper
and I was scared
to open up so honestly
in my nakedness,
under your gaze, your eyes
peering into, through
the thoughts that jangled
around in my head.

You do that
You do this to me
You don't have to try

"Protection against werewolves,
vampires, and other boys"

It weighs heavy against
my skin, I know it's there
along with the dotted line
trail you marked along
the way.

Is it worth the wait?
Was it worth the time
gone by, unknowing what
we two had been through?

Yes
Yes

I'm falling
I'm trying not to
but like the spider said to the fly
"come into my parlor"
I did.
I entered, and became
ensnared in the words, the kisses,
the sliver strands of caresses

You've caught me
off my guard, with the walls
down, I invited you
into my world.

Don't break me.

Reviews

[Stammers]

'I'm falling
I'm trying not to
but like the spider said to the fly
"come into my parlor"
I did.
I entered, and became
ensnared in the words, the kisses,
the sliver strands of caresses'

that's stunning, the whole thing is really brilliant, I like your free style, and will be definatley reading some more of your stuff, nice first line too.

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so so surreal--awesome write!!!
"The words flowed
out of me, I repeated
them against your
smile, a whisper
and I was scared
to open up so honestly
in my nakedness,
under your gaze, your eyes
peering into, through
the thoughts that jangled
around in my head."
...Great Verse!!!
Love This Poem!:-)

james:-)

[Ebby]

Hi Amber,
Your style has changed a little since I last read you. The rhythm is still there, yet has softened edges and a delicacy which adds something, perhaps a sense of time and place. I like this very much and will read more. x

[the ghost of pauls]

Perfect, delicate and real.

[Helen Woodward]

Such an uplifting piece in many ways with an underlying sadness. Don't break me indeed...Love is such a minefield of emotions and double jointed phrasing. I think you have captured just that here Sherlock :-)))))
((((((((((((((((((((SHERLOCK)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

oh, i wanted to say i love the title you came up with ..Sleep Gauze..very catchy

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

so so lovely .. i dig your style ... love the free flow that comes so easily so it seems..very nice last line..loved it!
peace
Chloe

[NightWriter44]

You still have your unique style...like an expensive wine glass teetering on the edge of a night stand.

[Tara]

Just wanted you to know you have touched another person with your words. This is a very vulnerable place to be. We all get broken eventually though....still gotta keep loving.

[Jonathan Ballam]

This was a somewhat tender and inventful write. I enjoyed the rhythm and power of your words.

Too beautiful ;)