Flick

The butterfly is moving

The energy that

Im feeding on

surrounds me in warmth

like a heat bubble,

a protective shell

that lets the words

 

drip

splat

plot

 

onto the paper,

purging memories

from the soul

that need not

be there

 

This new life

being breathed into

a deflated will to move

is welcomed as a flower

welcomes a drop of rain

 

 

Reviews

[GBU POETRY ONLY]

FLICK is full of energetic imagery.. And flows nicely...
I loved the image that drips from the passage "a protective shell
that lets the words .. drip, splat, plot onto the paper,
purging memories" ...and the ending is refreshing... Bravo!
GBU

[Red Rose]

great poem!

[deeps]

This new life
being breathed into
a deflated will to move
is welcomed as a flower
welcomes a drop of rain

Amazing lines and wonderful.
I like this write alot.
You have style and skills.

[Ruth]

Wonderfully written friend, love the almost claustrophobic feel that breathes at the end :) Poppy

[Narnie]

This is beautiful and the sound effects bounce from the page. Brilliant stuff.

[Forest Green]

A splash of poetry; bright, clean, delicately revealing; as delightful as the rainbow caste by every drop of rain.

[Ed Hart]

most excellent, most excellent