A Familiar Itch

You know what time it is...

 

The familiar feeling struck

me, while driving

in the misty fogged

up streets at 9 pm

tonight.

It felt like I was all alone

in the world, my headlights

cutting through to

 

nothingness.

 

This drive gave me pause,

it brought me to the doorstep

of a place I'd rather not have

been. We all have that door,

with the chains, locks,

padlocks, and the signs set

to say Here There Be Monsters...

 

I, being who I am

laughed and walked right

in, and made myself comfortable

in the dust, the grime of memories

better left alone.

 

(Is it my fault that music

can slam me back into

rehab? The first time,

not the last)

 

I think I don't say

thank you enough

to the people who matter

the most to me.

I dont say the silly

three worded phrase

enough to the people

who actually deserve

the truth from my

battered lips.

 

You would think

that with the lessons

learned, I would

have taken that one

to heart.

 

I laugh

 

I still can't take

it you see.

I still don't take

what is given with

ease. I nod, smile

and tell them they

lie in my head.

They do, you know.

"Why do people s**t on you?"

"I'm accustomed to it. It's what I'm here for."

 

But is it?

 

"Your personality is great"

"Thanks?"

 

My personality won't get me

far. My personality wont

pass the classes that

bog me down and

prove how silly I am

for wanting to chase

my dream.

 

Just once...

 

Id like to show the world

or hell...

tell the f*****g spinning

world that I am here

I breathe

I think
I feel...

(that one's funny, I know. You can laugh. I did)

 

Again.

 

What is it

that I am

supposed to

do?

 

 

Reviews

[Michael X]

Wow, this is absolutely epic and what strikes me is the emotion. so powerfully sculpted in a way that creates the impression of life, love and longing beautifully invented the way art effects perspective. i could find my own thoughts drifting throughout this masterful piece of writing. and sentiment.

[Ruth]

This is awesome! Sometimes we have to laugh back at fate so to speak :) Poppy

[Sean M. Addams]

i like this alot very power and you did well taking us through this deep and emotional journey... overall i thought you did an impressive job on this...

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A man said to the universe:
"Sir I exist!"
"However," replied the universe,
"The fact has not created in me
A sense of obligation." ...Stephen Crane

I like that poem, shows just how small and unimportant we are in the grand scheme of things. Everybody gets s**t on some time or another; I try not to take it too personally, I hope I'll get back up; climb back to the top of the heep and find my place in the sun, that's all. It doesn't do any harm to hope and no good to worry I find. Like my dear old departed daddy used to say, "Son, don't take life so seriously, you'll never get out of it alive!" Good write.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Again you really take us on an emotional journey, this time you really empathize the every day mundane things that turn into emotional obstacles
This part really spoke to me...

It felt like I was all alone
in the world, my headlights
cutting through to

nothingness.

always feeling like there is something greater out there but it always eludes us.

[Narnie]

I try not to scratch, 'cause sometimes I find it too hard to stop. I like this and empathise. x

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Angelheaded Hipster,

Thank you for the read request and thank you for sharing this piece with us. You can write almost any topic it seems like and still retain a good flow in it, bah-ha-ha. xD This one didn't appeal to me as much because love doesn't effect me the same as it does others: seeing as I've never been in a serious relationship so I wouldn't know. (nice guys finish last v_v) But I did find it good enough to keep my attention; it seems to me more like a reflection of past memories but I think I got a little confused "(Is it my fault that music can slam me back into rehab? The first time, not the last)" If it's the first time, how can you be going back into it? o.o Expression is your key element as a writer, it seems like. It's sad that most readers like some of the crappiest stuff on poetry sites in general. Some call crap poetry these days, I guess. And I've been guilty to that before in my life. There can be some misconceptions as to what good poetry is. But anyways, good poem. Rhythm from stanza to stanza varied, could be distracting. Overall, nice job. Kudos. 8.6/10.

(P.S. I did find parts of the poem humorous. xD)

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Tommy]

Once again it is like you are writing thoughts dug out of my own head. I start to read and as a lot of people I relate to this piece, but what brought it home for me is, I am in school and have had this stanza in the back of my head for a while:
" My personality won't get me
far. My personality wont
pass the classes that
bog me down and
prove how silly I am
for wanting to chase
my dream."

I am up at this manic moment and I am finding peace in your words; because they reiterate the fact that we are not alone in our troubles of life. I know how cliché of me to say this, but it is true, to me, today.

Great piece! Thanks for sharing.

RLG,
Tommy

[there is no more from m..]

What a briliant Poem :-)

[Ed Hart]

a very familial itch...