Overdose

too much?

Fading away into a dream

My mind has lost all concepts of reality

This drug just isn't enough to keep me high

"So I'll take you higher" I told myself

A broken reflection staring back at me

Sleepless eyes staring deep within my soul

Exploiting every flaw hidden from the world

"What's happening?" I whisper as my blood runs cold through my body

"You're dieing" I tell myself through a shattered mirror

Paralyzed now by my own device

I could never escape this pure ecstacy

So I'll take it to my grave tonight

Reviews

[Canne Mills]

cold feelings from...

[No use.]

foreboding and chilling, words flowing downward in a pool of silver metal, thick, unreachable, without ears , unable to hear the omens , the blackness pervades after the exstacy

[Eric Cox]

This is rather frightening yet at the same time rather peaceful, maybe that's what happens when we die.

[Alexa Tasch]

chilling and dark. just how i like it. it seems so ewal though as if you have overdosed several times and know exactly what it feels like

[Dalebear]

This is a daek anf chilling poem but beautiful
Keep writing

[r]

OMG! This is SO amazing! I lovers it! Just... it's so chilling, and beautiful. Yeah... I just love the way you word everything. It's amazing.

[Graceful]

...oh...my...gosh..........that is amazing. I love the whole thing, your ideal, the way you wrote it, everything! BRAVO!

[chillz]

great job....

There are some really great lines in this piece, they really stand out with skillful construction and meaning. (If I start listing my favourites, I'll probably list most of the poem!)
Definitely not too much, just right to convey the message of misery and that lack of escape feeling that leads people to decisions such as this.
Enjoyable in that dark sort of way :)

[Voice]

This poem holds a deeper meaning for me. My father died this way 14 years ago. The anniversary of his death was just a few days ago so I kind of find it ironic. This is a great piece thank you for sharing.

Voice