The rain finally came.

First it was the cold wind,

a friendly warning to the winter ahead

that will knowingly and willingly drown us,

a climate we're accustomed to.

 

Normally I'd be grateful for cold, wet rain

offering to wash away the hot, dry summer,

to keep me busy staying dry;

too pressing to let my mind wander to more dangerous places.

 

This year I'm hardly so lucky,

as the thick, gray drops soak through my clothes

and make me heavy,

adding weight to the baggage I carry around.

 

Just think;

this year I thought I'd be glad

when the rain finally came.

Reviews

[beancountersar]

Funny how our situations can 'damper' even the weather we like. Very well done...very visual piece.
Bravo!

[Kiara]

love your expression
and how it was used in
this piece,this was an
enjoyable poem and quite
beautifully written : )

[hey]

I love this piece. I love the way you talk about how you usually enjoy rain but now its just one more thing adding to the baggage of every day life. This is subtly beautiful, and soft. I love how you can speak somewhat negatively about something without being harsh.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I love the rain too but there are times when it is not needed... and especially emotional storms that always hit when your already drowning... really like this... great expression of how life can overwhelm us.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

We had cold rain all day here in Carolina. I cooked a big pot of beef stew and baked some homemade biscuits and sweet potatoes and settled in front of my t.v....nothing like good hot food and a movie to pass a day in the cold rain. very nice poem here.

[PianoandPage]

i love the description of "as the thick, gray drops" - just reading that made me feel heavy and down. the flat feel of paralysis.

the relationship with rain is really interesting too... how it keeps the mind away from "dangerous places".

i like the pacing. good write!

[Kasey Klein]

hello Molly. Thanks for the invitation to read.

I like it, good tone.

For short poetry, it's much to wordy for my taste. I like to see short poetry sharp and pointed, with no words wandering off the page.

"it was" "there was' and the like can often be deleted or written sharper.

"First, the cold wind..."

For my taste, I don't like to see 'it was' and 'there was' in narrative fiction either.

Do review the rules for the semi-colon.

[Michael]

I really like poems that have a singular nature to them. With this one you prove the Axum: " poetry is giving emotion to words."

Well done

[.abigail.]

nice poem, but i couldn't help but notice that you used the same pic for your poem as i did for one of mine lol =)

[An owl on the moon]

Your style is so perfect... So conversational, yet profoundly poetic. You speak, paint words, and give rise to the sunrise of a new world...

Craig