Revenge Sex

when you're sitting at home

brooding,

moping,

pacing

and stewing

thinking of what i'm doing

rest assured that the

"what" should be a "who"

 

and i'll be screaming

scratching

tugging

biting

and moaning as loud as possible

because orgasms are so much better

when you're not involved.

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Ha, ha -- the "punch line" was a nice surprise laugh.

Like a vengefully sexier Dylan line: "I wish that for just one time, you could stand inside my shoes/Then you'd know what a drag it is to see you."

Ya know, it's short and stingingly sweet, and leaves ya wanting more -- I could see a volume of such "eff you, I'm f*****g another" zingers. Gives a new twist to a New Avengers series notion. ;-)

[Sound]

Baseball. Dentist. Doctors. Needles. Cemetary. Pain. Blood. Blood. BLOOD.

Ok, I'm good.

As for the review. Very, very good write. I couldn't help laughing outloud at the end, which is bad because I'm at work. This poem probably hurt more than anything else you could have physically done.

[Legion]

Well, that is a nicely penned slap in the face and kick in the groin. :) Hope he feels it.

[Heretic]

Okay, I don't usually read poems, but with a title like that, how could I resist? It obviously grabbed my attention. And then... well you wrote it, you know. It's pretty awesome. Actually, kind of reminds me of a past relationship. I loved this poem. Short, sweet, and to the point. The ending is definitely the best part... though, there are only really two parts. Anyways, good job. I loved it. Made me laugh. Hope that's what you were going for.

[Trée]

Ooooooh, I like the way your mind works. :-D

Rest assured. :-D

The What that should be a Who. Classic. The bitterness at the end is wonderfully wrought. Excellent work.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

sooooooooooooo funny.... I loved it :)

[PianoandPage]

darling. ok. let me say this. i've been in a bad mood all day.

this. wonderful poem actually cheered me up. it's that good.

wow.

i love the form. i love the pace. i love the two stanzas and how they reflect each other. i love the acerbic wit and tone. i love love love this.

it's strength, and f**k you, and confident and unabashed.

YES!

[Forest Green]

Wow...this one is quite revealing.

Stone cold rejection...!

Yet phrased quite succinctly...

Nice work...!

Daniel

[emz]

haha i almost felt sad at the start.... but then... nothing better than sweet revenge.. i liked this alot.

[Mel]

Love it! It's a great expression of liberty, being who you want and doing it with who ever you please. The beginning almost makes you feel sorry, but then the end is so sexy and smooth, you just can't help but fall in love with the vengeful and sensual narrator. Also, the ending is so angry and passionate. It's extremely powerful and well written. Good job!