Never

I never snapped.

I felt it tug and pull and push and shove my heart until there was a head on collision inside me and I was the casualty.

I never cried.

I sobbed and screamed and counted down until my breathing was slow and even it hurt a little less but I still felt like I was bleeding.

I never bled.

Instead there was something else pouring out of me and it hurt more than blood would have and the snap and the cry and the break were all flooding out of the hole in my heart.

I saw you snap.
I saw you cry.
I saw you bleed.

Bleed words full of pain and anger and fear and regret, and as you did all I wanted was to take everything I'd said back.

I bled.
I cried.
I snapped.

All over you and because of you and into you and the regret flooded the room until I could no longer breath any of you in.

Reviews

[FIN]

This is remarkable; torn me to pieces by witnessing your pain through this hardship and put me back together instantly by expressing remorse towards the counterpart in the story just to tear me open yet again by the expression of you now "bleeding, crying and snapping."

And the ending,

"All over you and because of you and into you and the regret flooded the room until I could no longer breath any of you in."

Very heart-wrenching. And debilitating emotionally.

Critique wise:
1: Add a space between "casualty" and "I never cried."
2. Add a space between "heart" and
"I saw you snap
I saw you cry
I saw you bleed"

"Or more so a return key 'the enter button' "

Very well composed and thought out. Nice job.

Much love,

LR

[Molly K]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it!

Yeah, I copied and pasted this here from my my computer files and I think the formatting got a little messed up on the way over, there are spaces - or return keys - where you said to put them in the version on my computer!

Thank you so much

[FIN]

Always.

LR

[Yehman84]

I like this; I feel I can relate! Highly emotive & fluent. Thank you!

[Molly K]

Thank you so much!