Live together .Die alone

*I can't find the road .when there's no light to follow .

life is ending and everything I touch is turning hollow .

we couldn't walk like we used to or maybe we're just turning shallow .

*my footsteps can't be seen.my eyes can't see the green .no trees to hide from the rain .now my hands aren't clean .

*nothing to stand against .I've felt the mist .now there's only rest .

*Silence is in my heart . all the beats have stopped and from my soul I've been robbed .

*wondering the world with my only wound .the no feeling of you is cold .just your eyes . 

                          will make me rise

                                                           I'll escape my demise 

                            * then our memories will never dies*

                                                          but

                                         *I couldn't do a thing*

*I just watched the little lights fly and eventually turn to stars

                     you see it when the clouds fade away 

                                       no smoke .only hope 

                                                   ....to stay....

Author's Note

you got it .a new poem .
I've been away fo almost a year but this is my come back . hope you all like it .

Reviews

[Black Jess]

Honestly i was captured by the title because i thought '' yeah it's true we live together and we die alone '' And i like your poem . the words rhyme well , they are deep , true , meaningful .well done

[Omikron]

I have to admit, the layout kind of bothered me at first, but in the end everything somehow seems to come together. I am a HUGE fan of the poem itself though, I've read it five, six times already!

[MohamedBencharef]

seems people like this poem , don't know why but I smile every time someone comments . thanks for the review and take care .

[Yurie Lee]

This is a pretty good poem~ I like the way you wrote it, with the asterisks and the spacing and such. And the picture really emphasized the meaning of loss you portray in this poem. So, nice job~! :D

[MohamedBencharef]

glad you like it

[Dynafox]

I think it's okay, and I assume you represent more of the dark side of the soul. I believe the problem with always being so dark is that there's no place to drop into this darkness. Stories with moments of light really outline and intensify the drops from that into despair.

[MohamedBencharef]

thanks for reading mate . this is when I felt weak . it's true how we're just people after all . and we can't control everything . it's something we learn as we grow .

[Insight "MH"]

Nicely written, I think you have done a good job here, but I hope these feelings don't haunt you in real life.😊

[MohamedBencharef]

don't worry mate hh

[Muslimah Triyati]

reading your poem make opening my thought that i been only thinking about life never about die.
yeach by thinking about die make us more be careful in our life and seeking road which give us a light so safety in the world n akhirat. your poem is good.

[MohamedBencharef]

thank you for sharing and reading

[andrew mitchell]

sometimes we find ourselves on our road of life alone! i enjoyed the tinge of sadness you injected in the poem

[MohamedBencharef]

glad you liked it !!!

[andrew mitchell]

you are welcomed

[Bear]

A song by the Moody Blues titled "Melancholy Man" comes to mind as I read this. If you have never heard the song here is a youtube link for the song https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uO3IG-oRpis
It shows just how relatable the topic is and how powerful a song such lyrics has the potential of being turned into. Very well done, I like it :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[MohamedBencharef]

thank you my bear friend .I'll check the song .maybe we'll get inspired to write more