Sweet Serenity

***WIND***

 

 

Breath of life,

now consume me.

I come,

to make amend.

I see,

 the smells aside me.

My dear,

 and blessed friend.

Hear,

the colors around me.

 Soul,

 captured completely.

This Grand,

blessed sea of trees.

 Leaves,

 speak to me softly.

 

 The earth,

 slowly becomes me.

Oh,

sweet serenity.

 Oh my,

 Sweet serenity.

 Truly,

blessed within thee

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

Wonderful write Melody...and though I don't usually follow instructions...I did as you asked and reread it with the music as background. A true meditational/yoga experience... I truly felt serene and at ease with the world...and boy can I ever use peace at this time...very soulful and heartfelt write Melody. rhythmic and ethereral...oozing with beautiful images.
Thanks for sharing Melody
allen

[Cole Hayley]

Beautiful! Very melencaholy and just so beautiful. I love the video aswell. Nicely done.

[olla]

nice.. I need this for my massage tretment.. nicely done..

[nigrum homonculus]

very good. got the sense of everything being very calm and just from the poem. an excellent write

[Just Listen]

I liked it :)

[Pencrafter]

Your poem does create a sense of serenity, along with the video. Seeing the smells and hearing the colors is heavy. Almost a spiritual experience. I'm not sure how wind filters darkness, but hey, it's your poem.

[Brad]

great meditation, breath of fresh air, a light daydream

[Chris]

I like the quality of the tones and their smoothness.

[w]

I agree with Zombie and I have to say that it would have more of an impact if you left the formating more simple.