Rhythms in Life

Rhythms of life is everywhere around me

The whistle of the wind does so entice me

The beating of my heart is just the start

The crackle of the ice as it slowly falls apart

Do we move too quickly in our everyday?

How fragile is our state of mind…decay?

 

Did we miss the offerings of morning dew?

Is it time to give way to the old anew?

Simplicity, serenity, wholeness and eternity

 

This is what I long for, to touch hear and see

 

May I slow down to beckon its voice once more

 

To let my own souls perceptions be an open door

I will promise myself to live and soon become alive

Only constant bussing around will be the bee hive

 

Awe sweet rhythms found everywhere full of life

I will transplant you were there once was strife

I will hear your song sung in every living thing

I will join in and let my hearts rhythm sing

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

absolutely beautiful

the content very agreeable

this is a masterpiece, you generously take your reader with you on your journey

"Simplicity, serenity, wholeness and eternity
This is what I long for, to touch hear and see"

Indeed my friend, the highest and ultimate path of healing I should imagine

[livetowrite]

Thank you for sharing. You cant beat rhyming poem. Yet another talented writer on here xx

[Elle Thompson]

Really strong images in the first few lines, you did a good job presenting the sensory elements. However, I was a little lost in the second half. I guess I was having trouble seeing the connection between rhythms of life and some kind of return to nature. I suppose it just wasn't what I expected. Also buzzing is spelt with two z's.

[SyberRose]

Beautifully penned and nice rhythm and theme...Rose:)

[bob, small b. aka invs]

very nice thoughts, nicely expressed.

[Loner]

Great sweet write i must say.....

[WillowWhisper]

Very soothing, like stepping into world where it's always spring, full of life and joy.
"I will transplant you where there once was strife
I will hear your song sung in every living thing"
Those two lines are my favorite, they're so strong and still so peaceful.

[emmajoy]

Wonderfully tumbling thoughts, lyrics almost, a song to life, of life .. 'I will transplant you were there once was strife ~ I will hear your song sung in every living thing'

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Your writing is so Good. Well Done! Keep Writing Friend!

Do u read mine 2 "Why?, Who is a Poet, Time and Anguish "

If possible then give your reviews..

Regards,
Lucky

[Stanley Wilson]

beautifully penned

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A most telling and beautiful piece, well done, good read.