Three days late in coming home

A fun poetic story

Three days late in coming home

My wife you’re furious with me

But listen close, this stories true

It’s what really happened to me

 

I stumbled upon a stone

too great in size to be missed

yet I was looking straight ahead

and now the ground I kissed

 

 I lay gazing upon the stone

I see it stained with blood

so… I was not the first to fall

on this trap here in the mud

 

As I stand and get my wits

I try to move the stone a pinch

I see now why it is still in place

for it would not budge an inch

 

So I sat upon the stone a bit

to think what I should do

To help the next poor soul

from the same fortune anew

 

now sitting there I see something

I’d completely missed before

within the trees I see

A slightly hidden door

 

When I rise to walk to it

I see the door no more

I sit back down and there it is

so I crawl across earth’s floor

 

As I breathe the dust in

That my hands did stir up

I must admit my dear love

My head was quit messed up

 

I watch the blades of grass

Turn colors unknown to me

I swear it true this second part

 the birds they laughed at me

 

I finally reach the door I’d seen

Yet now it’s too small for me

So I laughed and knocked upon it

Next thing I know…

…. poof I’m here with thee

 

 

Reviews

[Muse]

Entertained by some of the comments below...anyways. This is more of a prose...that tells a great story. I feel like it is your husband telling you to please be patient with him...he was late because he was injured. He then begins to reminisce about his experience...and in his state of confusion...poof...he's in purgatory once second...and poof...three days later he's home with you! I may be way off the mark...sorry...this is what I got out of reading you. Wonderful penning.

Muse

[Coyote Poetry]

I had to read a few times. You gave me a lot to think about.
'So I sat upon the stone a bit
to think what I should do'
Sometime good to ponder life and be with nature. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha, ha, nicely told tale. Simple and graphic in the telling with a nice exit strategy lol

[Larry Dyson]

hi , great fairy tale..prose...and yet poetically rhyming...love the story line..and "Poof im here with thee"...hahaha.Laury

[Dr. Wood ?]

great excuse for being late in...I shall have to remember that one...Should I ever get to go out

[James William Dyer]

I like how this reads as a mini-story and I like the fantastical elements you included. In this case the rhyming is actually nice because I feel it's supposed to read almost like a fairy tale, and from that perspective I would almost try to reword it in places to seem somewhat child-likke, like a hansel and grettle story.

[deepblue04]

wow, your poem has such a nice flow to it, that makes it great. another part is the plot, which is great. good job! :)