Three days late in coming home

Three days late in coming home

A Poem by Kimberly "Melody" Carney
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A fun poetic story

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Three days late in coming home

My wife you’re furious with me

But listen close, this stories true

It’s what really happened to me

 

I stumbled upon a stone

too great in size to be missed

yet I was looking straight ahead

and now the ground I kissed

 

 I lay gazing upon the stone

I see it stained with blood

so… I was not the first to fall

on this trap here in the mud

 

As I stand and get my wits

I try to move the stone a pinch

I see now why it is still in place

for it would not budge an inch

 

So I sat upon the stone a bit

to think what I should do

To help the next poor soul

from the same fortune anew

 

now sitting there I see something

I’d completely missed before

within the trees I see

A slightly hidden door

 

When I rise to walk to it

I see the door no more

I sit back down and there it is

so I crawl across earth’s floor

 

As I breathe the dust in

That my hands did stir up

I must admit my dear love

My head was quit messed up

 

I watch the blades of grass

Turn colors unknown to me

I swear it true this second part

 the birds they laughed at me

 

I finally reach the door I’d seen

Yet now it’s too small for me

So I laughed and knocked upon it

Next thing I know…

…. poof I’m here with thee

 

 

© 2013 Kimberly "Melody" Carney


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Entertained by some of the comments below...anyways. This is more of a prose...that tells a great story. I feel like it is your husband telling you to please be patient with him...he was late because he was injured. He then begins to reminisce about his experience...and in his state of confusion...poof...he's in purgatory once second...and poof...three days later he's home with you! I may be way off the mark...sorry...this is what I got out of reading you. Wonderful penning.

Muse

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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An interesting read, funny in a sense, how a husband tells a story for being late to his wife

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A most delightful read
possessing a charm we all wish we possessed
Nade it a fav
so I could enjoy it again and again

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Better late than never... totally agree with all; this is a wonderful piece! :o)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

and then, and then, and then poof! I'm here with thee. I really enjoyed this tale! I can just see this poor guy trying to tell his story to his angry wife, who's probably tapping a rolling pin in the palm of her hand, waiting, just waiting for the right moment. Almost want to believe him, the story's so wild. Aliens? who knows? The truth is out there.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I quite liked, although I have enjoyed many more of your other poems a great deal more.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Entertained by some of the comments below...anyways. This is more of a prose...that tells a great story. I feel like it is your husband telling you to please be patient with him...he was late because he was injured. He then begins to reminisce about his experience...and in his state of confusion...poof...he's in purgatory once second...and poof...three days later he's home with you! I may be way off the mark...sorry...this is what I got out of reading you. Wonderful penning.

Muse

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When I read this I wasn't sure what to think because my brain was overwhelmed so I had to read it again at a later date. That is why I didn't comment at first. Aside from all that...I appreciate this piece. ^^* It is just a great read in my opinion.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I disagree with the grammar police, longer words are not all that~
You have more on the stick then she has in her shovel so she is envious
of the fact you have struck gold with poetic story telling...
Wonderful work,had me at "Three days late in coming home"
100/100



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved the flow of this and the like a fairy tale I loved! Brilliant!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sounds like an alien abduction case!! :) Nice work, the title has 'tree' should be 'three' yes?

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Kimberly "Melody" Carney
Kimberly "Melody" Carney

Denver, CO



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