Sweet taste of victory

I dream a dream of a better life

I will make it come true

I do not have to believe in myself

I just simply have to prove

all my fears and doubts untrue

 

the sweet taste of victory

 I long for

 

the sweet taste

 will purge my mouth

from the taste of sweat and tears

I will have on my tongue for years

 

a journey on this path to dreams

is not an easy road

it is        my passion

it is       my dream

and it’s worth every burden load

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Joshua W. Harris]

This is a beautiful piece, and I found I could connect to it much more potently because of how eerily similar it is to the mind and situation of a main character I am currently writing.
A beautifully described struggle, and the wonderful feeling of a struggles worth. =]

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Beautifully done ,Melody :)

[lee von cleef]

If we are all alone in this world, if we are alone, if alone ,then it is just ,I .
in the wilderness of choice.

[Stanley Wilson]

great imagery well written poem enjoyed it

[Larry Dyson]

I dream a dream of a better life(a better life I dream of truely)willing it into becoming a surety)belief in my conquered doubts won steadfastly)



I will make it come true



I do not have to believe in myself



I just simply have to prove



all my fears and doubts untrue







the sweet taste of victory



I long for





the sweet taste



will purge my mouth



from the taste of sweat and tears



I will have on my tongue for years







a journey on this path to dreams



is not an easy road



it is my passion



it is my dream



and it’s worth every burden load


{(a better life I dream of truely)willing it into becoming a surety)belief in my conquered doubts won steadfastly)

see the thoughts hold true even in meter change?

[Larry Dyson]

I love the thought process you take us through.. and the ultimate truth spoken...

[That1Nerd23]

This is wonderful. Great piece, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[Celestial Witch Child]

Powerful. Very well written.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Have to mention the first thing I saw here - What a stunning picture! The frozen chill and cold leaving the world white blue and gray.

Your poem touches my heart. The passion and desire for the dream you have comes through in every line, and with such a deep need of it you can surely overcome your doubts and fears. This inspires me, it is not a cheering rally poem, but a heartfelt, tender, honest self-talk.

[h d e rushin]

I have been accused of giving non-constuctive reviews. But your poetry is
as delightsome as it is thoughprovoking. The greatest review there is, is
to say it gave you pleasure..Than you for sharing and for being here among us.

your biggest fan, dana.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

I am humbled! ;)