Sweet taste of victory

I dream a dream of a better life

I will make it come true

I do not have to believe in myself

I just simply have to prove

all my fears and doubts untrue

 

the sweet taste of victory

 I long for

 

the sweet taste

 will purge my mouth

from the taste of sweat and tears

I will have on my tongue for years

 

a journey on this path to dreams

is not an easy road

it is        my passion

it is       my dream

and it’s worth every burden load

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Joshua W. Harris]

This is a beautiful piece, and I found I could connect to it much more potently because of how eerily similar it is to the mind and situation of a main character I am currently writing.
A beautifully described struggle, and the wonderful feeling of a struggles worth. =]

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lovely poem, the message to always aim for your dreams no matter what is beautiful xxx. Great write :O)

[Cole Hayley]

Very beautiful. I never read anything from you in a while! where have you been? But, as the poem, beautiful as awlays.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

I am fighting for my health. I write when I can...reading others work right now, slowly working through the many writers that deserve it. Hope you all don't give up on me thinking I do not care to read as I do, I'm just very very slow! ;)

[khalid]

i really love the spirit of challenge in this poem. you have been putting a path for those who feel frustrated or disappointed. it is really a great motivation for all. you have used a very nice simple language items to express your dreams and thoughts..

[SHEEMA HUQ]

and here here to your efforts and determination..

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This is a very nice piece. the one part I felt that didn't fit was the 3rd line
"I do not have to believe in myself"
I say this because the rest of the piece is so empowering! And I think you do believe in yourself!!!
You speak so true about the journey to the path of dreams not being an easy road. These words hit the spot. A journey of a thousand miles may be still not get us to our dreams, yet that extra mile is all that is needed. But in the end you are correct, it is worth every burden! So believe in yourself, and with that you will prove and your journey will be successful!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

I say that because sometimes we stop because we still have self doubt, we do not have to beleive in our selves, sometimes the fight is what brings out the faith we lack in the begining.

[emmy bon]

lovely poem, well done

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Lovely picture you have there, the poem you have though is lovely too. :) I like how you write your yearning for the taste of victory and it really is true: Isn't the taste of sweet sweet victory so delectable?

Nice write

[deepblue04]

this is good! good job!

[Art Sun]

nicely written poem...to dream is to overcome...nice

[Tainted Devotion]

This is one of the most relatable poems for me that I've ever read. It spoke to me immediately. I love the picture that you chose for this. It's absolutely beautiful. Amazing work. Keep writing. I like what I see.