Sweet taste of victory

I dream a dream of a better life

I will make it come true

I do not have to believe in myself

I just simply have to prove

all my fears and doubts untrue

 

the sweet taste of victory

 I long for

 

the sweet taste

 will purge my mouth

from the taste of sweat and tears

I will have on my tongue for years

 

a journey on this path to dreams

is not an easy road

it is        my passion

it is       my dream

and it’s worth every burden load

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Joshua W. Harris]

This is a beautiful piece, and I found I could connect to it much more potently because of how eerily similar it is to the mind and situation of a main character I am currently writing.
A beautifully described struggle, and the wonderful feeling of a struggles worth. =]

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great piece, love the message, well, I guess fears and doubts are the company of every man, nowadays :( I could feel the message because that's what I'm living :)
The burden is HUGE, hope victory will be worth it :)

[Manpreet]

Nice write!

[Mary]

And remember that there is a kind of sweetness in the struggle as well. And your lines of proving that your fears and doubts untrue is truly the path to victory, to believing in yourself. This is a beautiful and powerful poem; inspiring! Thank you for posting it.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice write and title, I really enjoyed the last stanza for the ending.

[The Scholar]

Very beautiful, and best of luck to you with all you strive to attain.
May all your dreams come true. :)

This was brutally honest as well, an attribute which makes the poem so great. Loved it.

[Canicus]

This is easy to relate to for everyone. I myself am a dreamer. Good luck to you with your dreams.

[the_stoic]

different style from your usual one .. but it's simple and put down in a lucid manner which speaks of the mind of the poet directly. nice one

[Patricia B. Hepler]

'...a journey on this path to dreams
is not an easy road...'
You are wise beyond your years. ~pat

[Who Cares]

Nice write straight from the heart; those are always best.