RAW

Raw

Eluded, our mind’s become, while we lick our wounds of past regrets, replaying painful scenes of misery over and over again, until we successfully relive it, one more time, finding a sick sense of comfort in it. Comfort in a false illusion that we are, what they made us, because of their cruelty and unthinkable ways, we are trapped inside what we are today, unable to break free from wounds that are unable to heal, wounds fresh and raw still. Raw from our constant unthinkable act of tearing back the new flesh trying so hard to rebuild upon a constant oozing wound made fresh again, over and over again, by no other than oneself, trapped in an eluded thought, wounded, raw unable to heal! Raw by choice, raw by our twisted ways!

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Manda]

This piece was very emotional and that is obvious in it's vocabulary. But I feel the subject of the poetry does not necessitate run-on sentences. It feels like it needs audible breaks that are not conveyed well with the punctuation. Try splitting up these sentences into lines, making it easier to read and still maintaining that strong sense of emotion.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

first attempt at a prose. I will work on it. Thank you;)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Well, if that's not a statement that flows from a passion similar to a repressed religion of persecution then I'm a blind beggar stumbling in the streets of your soul. I ran into a deer once, literally. I only had a bludgeon to put it out of it's misery. That cruel compassion has remained with me to this day. Perhaps someday Bambi will forgive me... perhaps you will too.

[marytownsend]

Most of us are raw by our own choices, and the inability to move past our hurts and wounds. You've captured that desperate, illogical state of our human condition in this poem! Amazing writing!

[afra]

very dark and deep write ....well done

[J Todd Underhill]

Well done and thought out piece, I enjoyed this one. I feel this daily as I am chained to my guilt like a prisoner chained to the iron ball. Dragging it around does get tiresome

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you, ;)