Sweet misery indeed

This is not how I feel in any way, it is simply a poem

 

How sweet are the words that whisper to me?

Whispering kind words of my death,

they tell me how the pain will stop,

my spirit will rise as my body will rest.

 

I contemplate the thought of it,

sweet misery indeed.

This thought, it does not let up,

constantly speaks to me.

 

My body broken,

rotted to the core,

sickness invades me

'till I am no more.

 

 

Is this voice the Devil inside?

Yet, it is making sense to me.

 

Without any drastic measures,

I simply, with this voice agree.

 

This hospital bed,

I am captive too.

All dignity gone,

just one thing to do.

 

I close my eyes and I let go,

slip away from my pain.

Release the burdons of loved ones,

my sickness drove insane.

 

 

My spirit will rise as my body will rest,

they tell how the pain will stop.

Whispering kind words of death,

how sweet are the words that whisper to me!

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

Right in my ear, My work has let me watch. People thrive ,their minds thrive on ,they pick two out of three, and feel good, they earn a B and feel good,but in reality they probably just lost their money, the dopamine in their heads makes them " feel" a positive interpretation , usually a financially , spiritual, moral ,blemish a hidden negative result, grows and grows. Dopamine "Feels" good,great....and me I feel guilty.

[Junert]

Nice poem.

[Rhea752]

this was so well written. I really don't know what to say. I'm in shock. I always am when i read an amazing poem. :)

[J Todd Underhill]

Hmm I loved this one, working my night away at the ER and I find this gem of a poem to read to help pass the time, well crafted piece... I ponder if you have attempted Sonnets or Villanelles? Your work carried the weight of someone who has studied their craft.

[Kes]

This is a little scary and so sad, but I love it. I sometimes wonder if death would be sweeter than life... but it's probably nothing at all. It's probably just falling asleep and never waking up - just not existing anymore.
You've captured those wandering thoughts and feelings of entrapment so well.
Great work. :)
K

[That1Nerd23]

This is wonderful! Great job!

[Leslie Philibert]

I like this, a good write. It might be worth putting the fourth and fifth verse together, so you have a constant four line form,and making the third and sixth verses a bit longer, so that the poem is a bit more compact. All in all a poem with lots of good lines.

[Allie]

Sickness, insane, and spirit are misspelled. I like the concept and theme but the writing and word choices are cliche.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

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[A Soap Mess Stories]

Have to agree with Ainarie, your use of exclamation points is well-placed and effective...good write.

[Laura Maidah]

sprit?

Without any drastic measures,
I just simply, with voice agree.