Slipping

Most of my poems are uplifting, I am a real person with real pain, and sometimes it helps to write about it. My mind is slipping and until I see a specialist it will slip farther and farther away.

 

My mind is slipping away from me

Thoughts long known seem foreign now

Memories both a blessing and curse

Yet they all are drifting away somehow

I fight the thought, and then it’s gone

Did I eat today? Yes, or am I wrong?

School, work, eat, sleep, stop

what I've done is escaping me!

Intelligent? Yes, I am for sure.

Yet, I can’t remember what I know

simple things get me frustrated

I can't remember the simple things!

Do my children look at me different?

Taking advantage, because I forget.

"But you said yes, yesterday mom"

Did I, would I, I can’t say...

It’s all just slipping away.

Mind as frail as this body I wear

My soul and spirit still full of life!

How painful it is to admit it

To say I just don't get it!

Well, even if I did, I would forget it!

Many things ail this mind of mine

Health, pain, scars of time.

Don’t be sad for me, its ok

I'll forget how I feel right now...anyway.

This pain ails me from deep inside

It’s something I can no longer hide

I’ll still write the songs of my soul

Maybe someday again I’ll be whole

 

 

Author's Note

This has no set rhyme or reason to it, on purpose. It is how I feel right now...I’m kind of all jumbled up.

Reviews

[Fréyjä Helv..]

The rhyming didn't matter. The sincerity of it just captures the reader. It's a beautiful poem by the way. Time devours us every day we live. Don't spend the rest of your life depressed and caught up with the past. That won't give you a healthy future. God bless...

[Lily Mae]

Sometimes when we mask or shove the pain away..it comes out and surprises us out of the blue.. Then we are left with the balance and clean up of emotions.. Not only do we suffer through these moments but the angels around us have to deal with us until we are balanced and in peace again.. sigh.. not that I know where your coming from lol ;) excellent penned emotions..xo

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

I through this suprisingly remain as balanced as I can and more often than not, laugh off what I can not change at this time. My body is just not functioning correctly right now and with medication it will get better with time. Truley not a big deal, just somedays are more fustrating than other.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

I do like this piece, Melody. There are lots of reasons why our minds become this way. Sometimes we hide the pain so well from ourselves that it takes us by surprise when there are side effects. Oh, by the way, I think you meant to write "ail" instead of "ale" (a drink). Anyway, great job!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

lol, I corrected that, thank you. This isn't caused by any hidden pain as I have delt with everything I go through as I am going through it the best I can. This is my brain not getting what it needs to function normaly. I'll be better in a few months or so.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Intelligent? Yes, I am for sure.
Yet, I can’t remember what I know
simple things get me frustrated

Memories both a blessing and curse
Yet they all are drifting away somehow
I fight the thought, and then it’s gone

it is like you are reading my mind... I love the free flow of this poem cause that is how feelings truly are.

[Mary]

I'm often that way myself, I've learned to accept and love that part of me. As for your poem, I think it's really good. The "jumbledness" is a good reflection on the theme of the poem.

[Freedom's Child]

I thought the flow was great, it perfectly resembled the scattered. Your words did a great job of expressing your feeling. Nice work.

[eighwoeifj]

Honestly, I can't really appreciate poetry if it has no rhythm to it. Yes, poetry is a way to get thoughts out, but there's a right way to get it done. It isn't just like a journal entry. There has to be some thought to the structure and sometimes it takes time to do that. I know someone below said that the jumped, chaotic format makes it easy to understand, but I feel the exact opposite of that.
Otherwise though, it is very meaningful. God bless you.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

Thank you for your review;)

[Falling Leaf.]

Lovely. Rhyme or reason is not always needed. The depth of your anguish and confusion is a rhythm alone. Marvelous.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Oh my goodness, so deep! I loved the flow and your word choice. I hope you get help, best of luck to you:)
God Bless

[Lina Grey]

Oh! I hope you get help. Honestly, it sounds like alhziemer's to me. I do like this poem, though. The jumbled, chaotic format make it easy to understand. Great write! Thank you.

[Lina Grey]

Oh, I also like how it still rhymes even though there's no set rhyme or reason.

[SmileBig :)]

I like this! Good job :)